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''mirror mirror
tell meth how
I shall looketh today
pretty sad or brave?''
to which mirror replied:
''taketh a way you may
now go and
find a faith
and maketh tell you
tales
and give myself a rest''
to which the
girl replied:
''oh mirror such
you tate
I shan't detain
you nay
any longer then weight
I shall looketh
for faith and if
I find it
I shall sure make it a stayt''
Pretty maiden with her maid
Prepares her charms for life today.
Her prince will see
No one but she
Would make a better wife today.
Anybody else?
MM. On reading your poem I looked again at the pic and yes, from her expression she could well be sneaking one out. I've often wondered what girls discuss when they get together, and this doesn't really help at all. I liked the last two lines though, good ending.
Pen. Intresting, the poor little rich girl scenario and the squelched ambitions of the dark skinned.
Cacian. I like your idea the best - a mirror tired of reflecting the same pretty face telling her to go out and find a different faith. The trouble is I don't understand some of the words you use, or the context of other words known to me. Is that intentional? Do you do it for an effect? I admire your confidence to make up a word when you need one, but I can't always see how they fit in either. So as usual with your poems , I THINK its very good, but am not entirely sure.
YesNo. A single simple idea, simply expressed. backed up by a thousand years of romantic notions.
And so to judgement....
I really wanted to give it to Cacian because of the central idea . So I read it about 20 times and interpreted it and substituted bits of it and guessed about other bits and tried to understand, and then decided that essentially, that is what poetry is all about - the readers interaction with the words the poet chooses and what he/she makes of it, what it reminds them of and what new thoughts it stimulates. (Just like The Wasteland!)
MM's effort also had something of this quality, while the other two were more straight-forwards - all the work was done for me.
So the winner is Cacian.
Prendrelemick I thank you so much for your confidence in this poem. The words I chose are just modelled around the piece for effect. A bit like pottery making I simply model words to fit the shape or the idea of the poem. I like visuals in poetry shape and sound wise.
Thank you very much again and this is the link to the picture my computer does not seem to let me download the picture but rather the link.:blush5:
If anyone can help here is the link to the picture:
Attachment 8520
What punishment should Julius get
For being who he is
Who thinks that any girl he's met
Is glad that she is his?
The idle ides of March are done.
Tonight she'll let him know.
The future's new and has begun.
It's time for her to go.
http://i85.photobucket.com/albums/k7...mick/19044.jpg
there you go Cacian
prendrelemick je vous remercie. Thank you.
Dreamers of the Sea
Dreamers of the sea
gaze wonderingly at the vast
uncharted beyond
while wistfully hoping to be swept
away to the far side of the world,
somewhere unknown
unseen
and each waking hour will bring
a new discovery,
but they remain trapped
in life's frivolities,
and tiresome idle pleasures
that bring little joy,
only expectation,
but they do not give up
that some day
their tide will come in
and carry them
far
far
far
Launching a Thousand Ships
She looks out to sea as the warships draw nigh
Helen of Troy with a gleam in her eye
Perhaps she would be more worried if she knew this
It was her face that launched all of these ships
War comes to Troy because the Goddesses were vain
Promised Helen to Paris not thinking to explain
That she was the wife of a noble in Troy
Playing their games with that weakling of a boy
Blood will be upon the water, death ruin the land
Lover and friends done to death by Greek hands
But Helen doesn't know the things that Fate holds
So she smiles out to sea in the soft sunset glow
Pendragon
(C) 12/13/2012
One more day to go anyone?
OK and here are the results of this round:
Whilst it has been very difficult for me to decide which to chosem the three pieces are a joy to read and all three deserve a first place win, I have to chose one and this time it is :
Day Dreaming by YesNo.
I felt the piece was short and concise and spoke to me. I enjoyed its simplicity and the way it reads. I also think the ''Idle of March'' did it for me.
Congratulations YesNo!!!
Thank you, cacian! I'll try to find a picture for the next contest this evening.
Here is an image of an ancient Egyptian couple for the next contest.
I've seen various statues like this with the female having her hand behind the male and sometimes the other hand might be on the male's arm. He is sometimes holding something in his hands and they are both standing. I don't know much about the style.
http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/Fi...279_couple.jpg
Here's another example of the style. Either image would work.
http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/Fi..._and_queen.jpg
Deadline: Sunday evening, January 13th.
Pharaoh and His Wife
Beneath the ancient skies
two lovers, hand in hand
walk together under a vastness
of the stars.
They approach
a world of uncertainty,
on the cusp of everything,
where power ripples as the sands
beneath their feet,
to dissipate at any moment.
To each other they cling,
to hold it together,
they stand tall bearing the weight
of the world upon their shoulders.
The gods watching above,
with critical eye
expecting to mold the divine
within mortal flesh
in their earthly representatives.
And rise or fall in time
they will become immortalized,
captured in one stolen moment
as but two lovers beneath
an ancient sky.