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Forgive me my tongue in cheek posting above Danik 2016. It was another of my futile attempts at humor.
I'll PM M4ngo and see if I can get a response. In my case sometimes life gets so hectic that I miss checking back in a timely fashion. If M4ngo does not respond in one more week of time I'll go ahead and do my best to judge and select a winner and continue on.
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
Never mind, Taylor. Just wanting to keep the ball rolling!:)
No answer from M4ngo so here goes... (hoping all is well with you M4ngo):
YesNo: Writing a Petrarchan sonnet (abba abba cde cde; passable volta @ L9; 10 sillybibbles per L) was a worthy effort of content and of form.
Danik 2016: I enjoyed your tongue in cheekiness in your poem; short, sweet, and to the point.
_Joe_: Free verse using 3-quatrains and a quintain; with a rag tag line scheme of: 10/9/11/10; 9/10/9/9; 10/9/11/7; 6/7/8/7/6. (I'm fond of the 6/7/8/7/6 quintain scheme myself.) An interesting mix of poetics. I can commiserate with your poem's sentiment... I feel the same way about lending out tools.
tailor STATELY: What can I say ? Rhyme scheme 6/5 5/6. Affixed and risk: a stretch for a near rhyme, but passable to my mind. Perhaps more interesting was the passive use of parallelism between the couplets. A bit of consonant alliteration play in each couplet made for a passable entry.
I give YesNo the nod this go round. Congratulations to all.
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
Congrats YesNo.
Tailor, thanks for the comments but my poem has nothing to do with the lending of tools. It's an extended metaphor for the risk of baring your soul and being vulnerable in front of others.
Thank you, tailor_STATELY, Joe and Danik for keeping this going! I hope M4ango is OK.
The next subject for the contest is "words".
Deadline: Two weeks from now.
I look at these contests with their prompts as an excuse to write something if only a first draft. If that writing turns out OK, it can be reused or revised for a blog or a future collection. It is practice, but potentially more than practice. That is why I set the deadline for only two weeks from now.
Thanks, Taylor for setting the thread in motion again.
Congrats. Yes/No.
Words: 1 Peter 2:9 KJV
when worldly rhetoric speaks
context weaves her spin - where lies
slither in susurration
a peculiar people seeks
heartfelt prayer; the still small voice;
covenants: eternal life
6/13/2016
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
Words
Offensive words
Cut like swords.
Dipped in wine...
Words open every shrine.
Whispered into the eager ear
tenderly at night!
They turn darkness into light!
But be they weapons, baits or tokens of love
Bound in strings or without bonds
Their meanings are always far beyond
them!
Time is up for the contest! Thanks to all who entered.
tailor STATELY: I liked the idea of mentioning "heartfelt prayer" as well as "lies" are both examples of the use of words.
Danik 2016: I liked the idea at the end that the meanings of words "are always far beyond them".
I enjoyed both entries.
The winner, the one to continue the contest, is Danik 2016! Congratulations!
Hearty thanks, Yes/No.
Our next subject is: Migrant people, Migrant countries.
Deadline: Sunday, July 3rd.
Congratulations Danik 2016 !
Thanks Taylor!:)
The winter months we’re planting trees
From Georgia west to Texas
And home is somewhere in some hills
Where costs are cheap. We pay our bills
The worst we feel are taxes.
In autumn there are harvests of
Ripe apples and blueberries
And home is somewhere else than here
Our families though we would keep near.
With seasons treasure varies.
Spring and summer we are home.
We have our gardens, too,
And home is somewhere, anywhere.
We take a breath, right here, right there,
Right everywhere we do.
Peripatetic (Non-Aristotelian)
We're a migrant people; stardust in our genes
Nomadic sensibilities spur us forward
Where grass is greener; to satisfy our dreams
(displaced war-torn peoples - whole countries made
migrant creating families adriftfodder affecting bloodstained state's fortunes)
the raging seas of strife; political
We'll inherit the stars after we gain the means
To navigate celestial winds - coming shoreward
Once learning eternal truths from He who redeems
7/2/2016
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
Thanks for your contribuitions, Yes/No and Taylor!:)
Deadline is approaching, if anyone wants to still enter.