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learn to compromise
let not yourself disappear
just enter my eyes!

Just enter my eyes
Steal the beating heart within
I offer it all

I offer it all
at least all that I can do,
beware of traitors

Beware of traitors
who sin against our soul, for
the may never learn

the may never learn
only to precede, alone,
attached to nothing

Attached to nothing
I am dust in violent wind
Dangling heartstrings

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Originally Posted by Il Penseroso

the may never learn
only to precede, alone,
attached to nothing

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how wonderfully clever.

dangling heartstrings
can trip you, so treat them like
weeds, pluck them away.

I actually couldn't think of any other way to take it.

though yours is genuinely clever, as usual :wave:

weeds, pluck them away
and brush ruby crawling foam
as you enter life.

god that one sucked


as you enter life
nudged ahead of what you know
remember it ends

Remember it ends
Love is best in a moment
Afterwards, pure dust

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Originally Posted by Il Penseroso

god that one sucked

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don't say that! I didn't continue from your haiku because I knew I wouldn't do justice to it, even though I was really really tempted to...I was waiting for someone talented to do that...
skip me

I'm not exactly sure what you mean, but when I said "that one sucked" I meant my own; that in my opinion I could have done better.

these are just for fun, I don't think anyone should feel pressure that their haikus will be judged harshly. the point, for me, is just to practice and exercise my creativity. it's a fun game, that should be looked at thusly.

please, don't feel that you're not good enough to post. :thumbs_up

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Originally Posted by jon1jt

Thanks, Kiz. Sometimes I get in the mood to just disappear. I think singer Suzanne Vega sums up this feeling for me perfectly:

"If you want me
You can find me
Left of center
Off of the strip

In the outskirts
In the fringes
In the corner
Out of the grip"

;)

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Awesome, I like it! Hope you didn't feel like I was pointing at you, I was (in a fun way) bugging you? :p

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crazefest456 --don't say that! I didn't continue from your haiku because I knew I wouldn't do justice to it, even though I was really really tempted to...I was waiting for someone talented to do that...
skip me

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Awww, craze, a misunderstanding! Your haiku is always fun and enjoyable to read and work from. IP is totally right -- this thread should just be a fun thread to practice our haiku skill. No one sits in judgement, and if they do, they need a life (sorry to insult but IP is right). Serious haiku can be made in another thread, the poetry section of the discussion board. OK, enough said -- to quote Bugs Bunny "and on with the show!"

Afterwards, pure dust
when all the crowds have gone home
a Boxing Day blitz

a Boxing Day blitz
left them tired and hungry
who would have thought that?

who would have thought that?
Who'd believe you're not mine?
Your heart betrays you!