There was a young lady of Fleet,
Her poems she'd never complete,
This Limerick's an example,
for you to sample,
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There was a young lady of Fleet,
Her poems she'd never complete,
This Limerick's an example,
for you to sample,
She grew out her bangs
To cover her eyes,
So lovely once,
Now scarred.
Thank you for the entries!
Dark Muse: I don't normally think of aliens as beautiful, but you've changed that for me.
Pendragon: This is a nice comparison of lived time with time used as one of the coordinates in space.
cacian: When water wakes us up it gives us enough consciousness to realize we're alive.
tailor STATELY: Nice contrast between a space probe and global warming.
prendrelemick: I was wondering if one could somehow fit a limerick into this form when I first heard of it.
moonbird: I liked the idea of her using her bangs to cover her scars.
The challenge with this form is that it is so short but still potentially longer than a haiku. I enjoyed all the entries. They could all be winners.
Winner: tailor STATELY
Congratulations!
tailor STATELY congratulations and thank you YesNo.
Congratulations TAILOR STATELY!
Thank you!
Next a Shadorma: meter = 3/5/3/3/7/5
A Shadorma may have more than one stanza, and generally does not rhyme, with each stanza following the 3/5/3/3/7/5 meter.
An example written on LitNet: http://www.online-literature.com/for...light=Shadorma
Entries end January 21st, 2013. Good writing!Quote:
pencil thin ~a shadorma
pencil thin
thoughts of compassion
up against
egoism
a narcissistic aura
hangs heavy and low
(c)2006 Susan Sonnen
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
Forever
Unbelievable
Forever
And ever
Expecting only peaceful
Night not this bright light.
Soft words
whispered in the night
tender love
loving care
pride and joy light up her eyes
new mother and child
Pendragon
(C) 12/27/2012
For my lovely daughter and new grandson, Logan!
Snow
Placid snow
drifting quietly
through the night
arriving
as the killer in shadow
utterly unknown
skies above
high in clear blue light
drifting stars
scenic mars
the air fills up to stardom
briskly lifting life
Butterfly
Tissue paper wings
She whispers
With perfumed
Breath, the secrets of her world
And what lies beyond.
Times up !
Will come back to render judgment asap.
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
YesNo.......................An interesting take on the eternities.
Pendragon...................A very tender poem. Perhaps "softest words" to fit the meter in L1. Congratulations re: your new grandson.
Dark Muse...................Snow as a malevolent force. Reminds me of James Kim and his misadventure; and others more recent.
cacian......................"drifting stars/scenic mars" tickled me.
moonbird...................."She whispers/With perfumed Breath"; pheramones and their role in the butterfly's world of mystery. Delightful.
And the winner is...
moonbird !!!
Congratulations all !
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
moonbird congratulations and tailor STATELY thank you :)
Congrats Moonbird!