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Yes soon, I just recently got back from vaccation so I haven't got around to it yet, but I have been meaning to shortly.
Pendragon: Beautiful and elegant, in spite of the darkness ( or perhaps because of it, for me) there was something I found almost serene within this poem. It had a lovely flow to it, and I really enjoyed your use of rhyme. Wonderfully written.
cacian: I am not sure I really understand this one, but it was quite interesting. I really enjoyed your use of language here, and the broad vocabulary, also I thought it did have a good rhythm to it.
YesNo: Another poem with a good use of rhyme. I really liked the repetition of "bright" I thought it worked quite well within this poem and it gave it an almost lullaby like feeling. I also really enjoyed the atmosphere which the poem set. It painted a vivid picture in my mind of a pair of lovers walking together in the park.
WhiteRabbit24: An interesting poem, I like the way in which there is both a touch of humor to it, as well as bleak reality. I enjoyed that sort of balance of the poem, as it starts out with a rather claming image, and then diverges into something more cynical.
And the winner is......
moonbird: I loved the imagery of your poem, and thought it had some beautiful lines and was quite haunting and enchanting. Loved the darkness of the mood and the touch of whimsy to it.
Thanks Dark Muse! The next form is one I only recently discovered, the Fibonacci poem. You may be familiar with the mathetician's famous sequence, where the sum of the last two numbers equals the third. This poetic style uses the sequence for its syllable count, which is as follows: 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8, etc. You can make it as many lines as you like in this pattern. For more information see the link below. Deadline August 1. Good luck.
http://www.writersdigest.com/editor-...ew-poetic-form
now
is
the right
time to be
the right way to say
those words all over again
life is an ingredient love is civilient
mix
all
for a
fun deluge
why
does
the night
call to me?
lost in my little dreams
what a way to live life these days...
pain
feels
like hell--
suffering
I do my penitence
does God still care or am I lost?
graves
seem
to be
a good thing
I wish I was there
visit me when you get the time...
no!
no
peace there
only pain!
I must enjoy life
in spite of all the things I hate!
push
the
tears away
dry my face
try to mend my heart
never easy, but can be done...
sleep
comes
must I
dream again
haunted by my fears?
remember why I choose to live
new
dawn
pink sky
time to rise
today celebrate
one more day I have made it through!
face
dawn
bright sky
cry a tear
moment passes fast
I smile and vow to cry no more!
Pendragon
(C) 8/18/2012
Voodoo
Snake
eyes
watch me
from afar,
this voodoo magic
courses strongly through my blood stream,
my soul vibrates with the distant beating of their drums,
dancing in a state of possession and opiate, come Papa Legba, come unto me.
Deadline in less than a week.
A Week Away
One
by
one the
blue mornings
come, each clutch of five
and trailing pair like trippers on
the promenade. Kids run ahead, grasping their pennies,
while mum and dad breath seaside air and send a card to
remind themselves of who they’ll be
should they be spared. The
post's on time,
but no
one's
there...
Veinte Poemas de Amor
Oh!
Live,
If not
For someone,
For the book lying
On the old table unopened,
On the same table where you will write your last letter
About things that make you sad, about things you hate, about ugly things not in that book.
cacian: A unique take on the form.
Pendragon: I love how you expanded it into several stanzas, it helped the overall flow. Your thoughts were very well explained.
Dark Muse: Stunning and dark, very beautiful.
MarkBastable: I like your simple rural style.
miyako73: Very beautiful. Loved the last line.
This was a difficult form and there were many excellent entries, but the winner I have chosen is Pendragon. Congrats.
Congrats Pendragon
Thank you moonbird and congratulations Pendragon!
Thank you one and all! Next form is:
Rondeau
A lyrical poem of French origin having 10 or 13 lines with two rhymes and with the opening phrase repeated twice as the refrain.
EX:
Untitled
Anonymous Woman Poet (12th century)
I walk in loneliness through the greenwood
for I have none to go with me.
Since I have lost my friend by not being good
I walk in loneliness through the greenwood.
I’ll send him word and make it understood
that I will be good company.
I walk in loneliness through the greenwood
for I have none to go with me.
Best of luck to you all!
The example didn't fit the description, Pendragon. Did you mean the form that was described here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rondeau_%28poetry%29
Sure, whatever, go for it, etc.Quote:
Originally Posted by YesNo