Congrats Dark Muse! :smilewinkgrin:
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Congrats Dark Muse! :smilewinkgrin:
Thank you, I will work on thinking up the next form.
I came up with an idea which I thought would be fun, so your next challenge is to write acrostic poem using the letters of your own user name.
An acrostic poem is a poem in which the first letter of the first word in every line spells out a particular word or name.
Usually the word/name chosen is also the subject of the poem, but in this challenge you may be creative with the content of the poem. It does not have to be about you or anything relating to your user name if you do not choose.
An example:
December eyes steal into my soul,
alluring diaphanous lips
retain alchemistic secrets,
keeping my heart within your ebon box.
Moth-like caresses upon my skin,
under the spell of your illusionist love,
serpentine kisses swallow me whole,
elusive I become lost in your labyrinth.
Yes, surprise smooths fearful corners
Easing pleasure, even pain.
Sudden peace for broken mourners
Now upends both loss and gain
On the joy of sunshine's rain.
corner to corner I see the stars
alignements make them float the skies
colours to colours I see the lights
increasingly brighter they swirl the tides
allowing the mornings to swim the heights
nautical fashion till night time glides
Past the limits of my mind
Endurance starts to shatter
No way out and no one I can trust
Dreaming broken visions of mocking ghosts
Reality seems illusion, can I pay the cost?
Act like nothing's going wrong, pray every day
God in heaven knows I don't know where to turn
Only Fate knows the future, my steps still stumble on
Nothing ventured, nothing gained, nothing lost...
Pendragon
(C) 6/21/2012
Moonless night of songbird cries
Our eyes reflect the starless skies
Onyx blankets lovers' kiss
Nighttime blooms with passion's bliss
Birds of heaven and of hell
In the whisper breeze's swell
Rolling over moonlit skin
Darkness hiding lovers' sin.
Thank you all!
This one was really tough, as you all had great entries.
YesNo: This was beautiful, it crated a very vivid image in a few words. I like the hopeful note in it, and the suggestion of rebirth. I also think that the balance between negative and positive presented within the poem, does reflect well upon your name.
cacain: This paints a wonderful picture of the night sky. This is beautifully written and has such a serene feeling. There is some lovely language here. I also like the originality used to describe a subject that is often addressed. The first line peeked my interest from the start, and I loved the last line.
Pendragon: A wonderful way with words as always, and this poem is so you. Quite haunting. I particularly loved this line "Dreaming broken visions of mocking ghosts" I also really enjoyed the way in which the last line gives the effect of fading away, and how it leaves things open.
And the winner is........
moonbird: This was beautiful and haunting, I loved the dark allure, and the imagery. Also quite enjoyed your use of rhyme. There was some great lines here, and nice use of language. I loved the opening line, which caught my attention right away and the ending I thought was great as well.
Dark Muse thank very much for the feedback and many congratulations Moonbird a very well deserved win!!:wave:
congratulations Moonbird
Thank you!
The next form will be the Sedoka. This style consists of two stanzas, unrhyming, each with the syllable count 5/7/7. For an example see this link:
http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/sedoka.html
Deadline is July 20. Good luck!
And the Stars Fell
Do you remember
on a sultry summer night
when you spoke your last goodbye?
How clear the sky was
and even then I loved you
we watched the stars as they fell.
Only one? I'm shocked.
Trying really hard
To achieve perfection has
been my only true goal in life
I have badly failed
But if I try perhaps I
Achieve perfection in death...
Pendragon
(C) 7/15/2012
Do Not Press This Button
The museum’s rules
Are impractical and no
Schoolkid could ever comply.
One, too free for five
Minutes, trashed an abacus.
You could have counted on that.