Jane Austen
fake
death
beforehand
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Jane Austen
fake
death
beforehand
Tough job to choose only one. You've been too good, dear friends! And, almost a first, I even understood your offering, dear cacian ;-) (only teasing, of course)
Let's see what we've got, first.
Well, cacian. You took me on a nice autumn walk, something I really like in real life, and which you rendered skilfully in your lines.
Pendragon, nicely done, too; short and to the point, the seasonal turn of death & decay to new births.
YesNo, minimalistic too, but the few words you used say it all. And a very "autumnal" subject, so to say, what with sadness and melancholia always lingering in the air, come October.
Melanie, I think there's a typo in your poem, but correct me if I'm wrong. Isn't it Jackson Pollock you are talking of? If yes, it's a fantastic example; indeed, some of his paintings do make one think of autumn colours.
Dark Muse, I really liked the "beauty of death" that ebbs away into gray.
jajdudes, well, yes, they're just leaves. I had to read and re-read your poem several times; first I understood "uncared-for-shed", as in "shelter of the uncared-for", and I was thinking homeless people with stacks of autumn leaves beside them. And I still don't know if I have really understood what you wanted to say, but I rather like being challenged by such a small amount of words! Poetry should make us ponder and muse, shouldn't it?
uhm, cafolini, I'm not sure at all that I got the sense of your offering. Would you mind explaining?
Anyway, there can be only one winner.
And I choose… ta DAAAAA!
Dark Muse
Congrats, and see you in the next round, everyone!
Congratulations Dark Muse! I also like "beauty of death" to describe the autumn leaves. Thank you, Dieter, for catching my typo. I fixed it. Yes, it was Jackson Pollock. You did a good job with your critiques...well done.
Dieter thank you for the feedback you did indeed a very good job and glad you understood this piece :D
Dark Muse congratulations !! look forward to the next round :)
Thank you, I will have a new subject up soon.
Ok next subject is Owl
Deadline Oct. 20th
The Barn Owl screeches
The Screech Owl wails
Great Horned Owls bark
So who says "who?"
Pendragon
Barn Owl, Typical Call http://www.owlpages.com/sounds/Tyto-alba-3.mp3
Screech Owl:Typical Call: http://www.owlpages.com/sounds/Megascops-asio-2.mp3
Great Horned Owl, Typical Call: http://www.owlpages.com/sounds/Bubo-virginianus-4.mp3
an owl
sat on a tree
sees skies
a sea
wonders to be
the bird of
free.
Owl sits in perceived wisdom.
It isn't the tree, nor the shining star that advises this.
It's man, or woman, in all her strutting glory.
This is why the owl sits in a tree.
Night Owls
the moon kissed the rim
of her dark merlot glass
as she sipped on nocturnal stares
and the nightbird's noiseless flight
Candy's Walk
Mimicking a tawny owl
invading the shadow'd light
Death coos: oo-oo, oo-oo
10/10/2013
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=txzOErCuQlo
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
The owl, looking for a treat,
Observes a mouse that's good to eat,
Who's hungry on the forest floor,
Then isn't hungry any more.
These were all some really good entries and it was quite hard to judge this one.
Pendragon: I quite enjoyed the humorous and playful nature of this. The last line really made me chuckle. I liked the idea of playing with the different calls of each of the birds.
cacian: As always very interesting, though I am not sure I completely understand this one I am very ingiruied about it. I did like the idea of an owl contemplating on the freedom of birds. And I liked the play upon words with see/sea.
jajdude: Quite an interesting and thought provoking poem. I had to read this one a few times and I am still not sure I understand it, but I really enjoyed reading it. Quite original.
Melanie: A very beautiful and haunting poem. I thought it captured a wonderful image. I also really enjoyed your interpretation of the subject.
YesNo: I liked your use of rhyme, and enjoyed the humor of this poem. It was a fun amusing read.
And the winner is......
tailor STATELY: I quite enjoyed the eerie atmosphere of this one, and loved the connection between death and the owl's cry at the end. This poem captured some great imagery in such few lines and this poem really captured the essence of minimalism I thought.
Good job tailor STATELY.
Dark Muse thank you and congratulations tailor STATELY.