Dark Muse -
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I can see the colors
of the sound of rain... and sprigs
of yellow like dandelions,
which make firecrackers
as the waters burst open
upon the ground.
and
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... becomes feathers
that I may dissolve into.
Fanciful and surreal; all the senses come alive; and daffodils!
and dandelions!
YesNo - Your rhyme scheme worked well throughout.
Enjoyed this:
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Winter's isolation brings
Loneliness to cover things
With white what once was springtime's best
When winter lays what's spring's to rest.
Adolescent09 - I found these lines memorable (note my small edit):
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From what branch of justice do ethic's fruit spring?
From what crystal chords, do angel's lungs sing?
and
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One preached "a cube"!, Physics retorted "a sphere"!
tickled my sensibilities. Seine/devine grated on me a little; funny that time/line did not.
The last line reminded me of a time of depression when I went on a fishing
trip just so I wasn't alone, but declined to bait my hook - negating the bother
of catching anything. O! Javert, thou racked with double-bind torment unto death.
cacian - I found this surprising, and quite charming (note my small edit):
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to choir in matin
the atmosphere is
melic
spring imagines
the world is magic
Pendragon - Loved this:
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Tiny fragrant flowers, bright colored birds
The feeling that Spring brings is superb
Soft warm rain, a rainbow sky
It comes in a flash then says goodbye
Your poem made me wax melancholy for some reason.
My lilacs are intoxicating - near in full bloom. I've found delicate blue
flowers only millimeters in size hidden in the green grasses - their fragrance
lost 'cept to a pea pod fairy.
Amazing poems from all: and the winner is after much deliberation: Dark Muse
Congratulations to all !
