Ok.
Times up !
I'm betwixt and between'd right now... will judge asap.
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Ok.
Times up !
I'm betwixt and between'd right now... will judge asap.
This was a hard contest for me to judge. That being said:
Hawg Horse - Eden: A jealous garden. "nare" caught me off guard(en): http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=Nare :and http://www.thefreedictionary.com/Nare : nostrilQuote:
1. Nare - slang for fire in Jamaican 2. The most amazing person in the entire universe... Hands down she is Pure Perfection. 3. The glare that shines off of nerd's glasses. Usually it shines so much off of the lenses it hurts your eyes.
Perhaps: "ne'er" http://www.thefreedictionary.com/ne'er : "A poetic contraction of 'never' "
YesNo - A lyrical tryst beneathe the beautiful Red Bud tree.
Pendragon - Eden: "It's been a long road out of Eden..." my favorite line.
cacian - Eden: I'm not clear on "heeden" and "teeden", but they do add to your rhyme scheme.
Twota - I might have been tempted to leave off L3 alltogether.
cafolini - A sandwich at a picnic in a garden !
Dark Muse - Reminded me of an Haiku.
And the winner is:
Dark Muse !
Congratulations to all !!!
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
DarkMuse congratulations and tailor STATELY thank you :)
Thank you very much, I will have the next subject soon, just have to think of something good.
Ok next subject is
Duality
Like This v. That
Like pistol duel v. every dawn
Like Holy Father v. fallen son
Like two pistols v. the two be one
Like sure shot v. ‘ever gone
Some say the choice is either-or
But others claim both-and.
Still others opt for neither-nor
Perhaps to bribe the gods for more
Than most can understand.
Luv it ... and with the title of YesNo, you should automatically win every duality duel, barring an entry from Maybe.
duality sides
both rank and mind
it is perfect sign
for health and time
Thanks, Hawg Horse! I actually was thinking of yours trying to imitate the "v." between the options while writing the "-".
Good and Bad
Jekyll and Hyde
Frankenstein or his monster
Which is alive?
Angel or Devil
Maybe both. Who knows?
Somewhere in my mind
My duality glows...
Pendragon
Great entries so far, deadline Feb 15
time's up right?
Yes, I had meant to try and get the juding done today but got caught up in other things, so I will try to do it tomorrow.
Ok thank you all for the entires
Hawg Horse: I really like the concept of this one. It was interesting and quite different though I did think that the use of pistols twice was a bit redundant and it made the 2nd line "Like Holy Father v. fallen son" feel like it was out of place since all the other verses revolved around guns and shooting.
YesNo: I really enjoyed this one, it had a bit of playfulness to it and a good flow. I really enjoyed the last two lines and thought they brought the poem together nicely.
Pendragon: I really liked this one, I enjoyed the Jekyll Hyde reference. I also like the way in which it is kind of a riddle proposed to the reader. The last two lines I thought were great.
And the winner is.........
cacian: I really enjoyed this one, and I think it captured the essence of minimalism very well. There is a great deal said within these few lines. Really liked the concept of the poem.