okay, another fan club. that's great. PL. (btw-how's that poem coming along?)
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okay, another fan club. that's great. PL. (btw-how's that poem coming along?)
narcissus once drowned
age curbing emolients
embodied his ruin
Great h, love the stair reference - terrific! I liked yours too Riesa - very much - the one before this post, with my closing line starting yours. Wonderful!Quote:
Originally Posted by Riesa
I changed my second line in that h - I counted, too, but math is not my strong point :( .I will get it right soon, the poem sounded better before, I think, but was not correct form...dern it...
embodied his ruin
the beach to the stranded whale
surf to sand prison
surf to sand prison
starts one's hike up Everest.
Must trek to thin air.
Must trek to thin air
Boots weighted by snow and pain
The summit is clear!
Il Penseroso has a way of dignifying my mediocre haiku..:lol:Quote:
Originally Posted by Riesa
Love this site - it is so much fun! But I have to go for the night. I am fading away....See all tomorrow! J
Good night, Janine! May choirs of poetic rock angles sing thee to sleep...:)
the summit is clear
White rain slash thy wasting skin
And I say-Goodbye
lol lol lol lol ~ :lol: Thanks Toni, I Love that ....very Hamletish! ...And yet I am still up and it is 1:34! What am I thinking? Soon the choirs of poetic rock angels will drag me to bed.... appropriate haiku for certain, at least last line....now my first line....Quote:
Originally Posted by toni
And I say-Goodbye
To all my tired confusions
Soon time will be day
Soon time will be day
Clammy digits tug the chord
Flat ECG line
Flat ECG line
cold sings morbid lullabys
It's not bad at all
It's not bad at all
the passing years will show us
how to laugh again
It's not bad at all
Now I found your pretty face
I want to hold you...
Hiya Oz! :)