Neither. Boxed mac-n-cheese, with hot sauce.
Sunbeam captured dust
sinks and rises by currents
touched only by air.
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Neither. Boxed mac-n-cheese, with hot sauce.
Sunbeam captured dust
sinks and rises by currents
touched only by air.
ick. :lol: I had a gardenburger with jalapenos.
touched only by air
the boy in his bubble
reflects in silence
I'm in college, so I make do with lots of cheap grosseries.
Reflects in silence
the rugged star of westerns,
all hands with a gun.
My favorite college food was top ramen with tuna and an egg, saturated with Rooster chili-garlic sauce. I've had my share of gross groceries.
all hands with a gun
the wicked wind's a blowin
meet sundown at Ike's.
That doesn't sound so gross.
Meet sundown at Ike's
the dropping day fills each bowl
with mystery chow.
That was really really good, congrats!! Im becoming a big fan of your haikusQuote:
Originally Posted by Il Penseroso
With mystery chow
Cerebral cows graze roughly
Teeth ache from thinking
Gee, quite a modification....Quote:
Originally Posted by Virgil
Glad I am not as overly sensitive about my lame attempt to write, as I am about my artwork.
I'd call that a total rewrite!
Virgil, how many syllables should it have? I can rewrite it. I don't really know the technical rules of H. It was really from a longer poem I wrote - modified it quickly for this post.
my new lame attempt:
Silence screams within me
Your ears deafened by the sound
Pages close forever.
beyond then and here
now gone to distance near
far beyond imaginings
this is fun but think I am pretty bad at it!
you skipped my haiku, its a continuation. but im glad youre getting the hang of it!Quote:
Originally Posted by Janine
here, ill repost mine
With mystery chow
Cerebral cows graze roughly
Teeth ache from thinking
oh and haiku rules go
5 syllables
7
then 5 again
and in this forum you begin with the last persons line
like with mine your first line will be Teeth ache from thinking
and the next person will start with your last line
Feel free to ask questions if youre still confused! And welcome!
Teeth ache from thinking
Back ache from loving to hard
Euphoric welts show
heya Janine, no worries Haiku took me a while to learn as well. You'll soon get the hang of it.
Don't forget the 5, 7, 5 syllabels
Euphoric welts show
I will wait here Like A Stone
Blind dreaming turned snow
Blind dreaming turned snow
Flecks of cream dot hooded lids
Waking and melting