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Originally Posted by Den

Haiku:
1. A Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

2. A poem written in this form.

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Take my soul there
Into a realm of quiet and
unremitted peace.

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Originally Posted by Dr Eep

Laindessiel wrote;
Mr. Eep, you last line is composed of 10 syllables! It's a Haiku, Doctor...I can't follow that...

Oops - OH Gawd - I stuffed up!!:crash: :D

After doing some hasty reminding of the use of syllables, is this better?

In the vein of love
move swift and free
take my soul there

Geez - I hope so:sick:

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You still must get your self sick, Doc...the last line is now composed of lesser than 10 but lesser than 5!!! Now how's that? Can I prescribe you something? :blush: :D :idea:

I want to get you all better! You are such a very moving poet!! I read your poems in your thread and it moved me heaven and earth!:thumbs_up :thumbs_up :thumbs_up

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Originally Posted by ShoutGrace

:D :D


Take my soul there
Into a realm of quiet and
unremitted peace.

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Shoutgrace, same goes for you, dear....
:blush:

Unremmitted peace
No break from constant warfare
Into the bunker

Into the bunker
Crime and love still lay asleep.
Wish they would not wake.

Wish they would not wake
But somehow they always do
Lets kill Prince Charming

Let's kill Prince Charmong
Not yet, said Charming Princess
"I will kiss him first"

I will kiss him first,
before I recede into
mist and nothingness

mist and nothingness
its what i feel inside me
im a slowly dying leaf

In slowly dying leaf
I sing lullabies to thee...
So long and goodnight...

This Haiku man....:flare: :lol:

How many syllables in the word 'Hari Kiri' - cos that's what I'm going to commit if I can't get this right.
4 right??? PLease tell me I'm right????
AS for the game;

Ahem...
So long and goodnight
my ego is blasted bare
come hari kiri:blush: :blush: :p

Hi Dr Eep!!! You are right, .. Don't worry...
Anyway...

Come hari kiri,
thy sins have aged in teardrops
hand me the dagger...

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was that good?

It was good for me.



Hand me the dagger
Remember how I told you
She would pay some day?

She would pay some day,
She had always promised to
Loan still unpaid

Loan IS still unpaid (Kilt, you only composed a line of 4 syllables)
Trudges on her dampened heart
And moist conscience too