You have a week and a day. More entries please. I'm loving them so far
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You have a week and a day. More entries please. I'm loving them so far
The word is not the thing,
Nor does the mirror show more than a face.
Yes, that's right, it's that time of the month again! I'm about to judge the winner so here it goes.....
YesNo - I thought that was a good, strong couplet.
Cacian - You're style of old English stuck out from the others.
Pendragon - Very minimalist. And I thought it had a good message, to stop searching so relentlessly.
moonbird - A good way of turning the question of self around.
Mystrymystry - I really like this piece. It was one of the runners up along with Tailor Stately's.
Dark Muse - I like your idea of multiple selves, and the questioning of which is real.
Tailor Stately - I enjoy the wise tone this poem takes. It seems to be almost a kind of Buddhist teaching.
jajdude - I got the implied message here that your identity comes from deeper places, and the word and the image mean nothing. A really great little poem.
So I think the winner just has to be jajdude. It was a tough call but a very deserved winner. Thanks for all the entries and congratulations jajdude!
Thanks breathtest.
New topic: Work.
Congratulations, jajdude!
Work
Sometimes we wish work went away
Unless we were laid-off today.
Congratulations jajdude !
Thank you. There are many interpretation paths one might take from my modest poem: LDS, Zen, various apotheosis genres, Mithrander's change after Khazad-dûm to name a few.Quote:
Tailor Stately - I enjoy the wise tone this poem takes. It seems to be almost a kind of Buddhist teaching.
Work at Sea
A fisherman's toil
is beyond renown
But perhaps the wisest
of the ocean-wise
do it for the halibut
3/31/2012
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
work indeed
has nought to fear,
it shall come light
as you make way
to something dear,
a newer feel
a reason why
you should endear
ideas of your own afield,
light is the wheel
that spins your dreams
turns all your hopes to real wish
and
raise you up to a world
of art,
impressions
are true work
of will.
Why work?
Why, when I needn't the money?
All I need is right here.
I can peer through my glass and see the room in amber,
Melting as the drops roll down,
Thick and heavy and golden.
I can see the smoke,
Breathe it in, in long sweet drags,
And they're free, because it's all around me,
And that's how I like it,
Free and easy.
Why work,
When money only buys me more of this?
Congratulations, jajdude!
cycle of life
earning
my daily bread
ain't as easy
as it used to be
work all day
play all night
youth
so elusive
age comes on
I slow down
one step closer
to the grave
work all day
complain all night
do it over
come next Monday...
Pendragon
(c) 2012
Werk
Werk's for berks
Werkin's for gherkins
Werk's irksome
Werkin's jerksome
Ok, 2 weeks is surely long enough to start a new, um thing. For me this one goes to mystyr because I laughed. I liked it even if it was silly.
YesNo did OK too.
I dunno, I look at these as needing to be short. I could be wrong.
Congrats mystyr
Warmest congrats mystyr mystyry
Thankyou Jajdude and Pendragon. I like this challenge because it forces you to condense, condense, condense
This next will be - Moondragon
Moondragon
Without her hair
She still looks hot.
She might fight fair--
Or maybe not.
I saw the silhouette
Rising to the moon
Like the ghost of a moth,
Its wings beating down
Cold winter winds.