Thanks for the lovely poems, Cassie and Cacian!
And we have a contest now!
There is still time for new entries until tomorrow night!
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Thanks for the lovely poems, Cassie and Cacian!
And we have a contest now!
There is still time for new entries until tomorrow night!
the seasons of my discontent
when that frigid hoar
o'er land and sky fills
every rill and rock gnawing
every wasted hour
this is the season
of my discontent
when the sun's wrath is
lashed scorching blade and
leaf with ne'er a breath
of air to bring relief
this is the season
of my discontent
when the fog that creeps
mists that choke and flog
visibility to nil cloaking
vale and hill to obscurity
this is the season
of my discontent
when whirlwinds rampage
both great and small
whirlblasts scouring the earth
and everything before
this is the season
of my discontent
when man loses sight
favoring might o'er
humanity advocating
power over sanity
this is the season
of my discontent
2/15/2017 r.2/16/2017
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
Thanks, Taylor, great entry!
I am closing the contest and chosing the winner tomorrow morning.
Until then posts are still welcome.
Thank you all for your entries, choice as always was difficult. A poem is always a special gift, participating is more important than winning.
As I know very little about English verses, my criterion for selecting the winner was the elaboration of the given theme.
Yes/No: Charming poem about the changing seasons. Humanization. The seasons are like friends that come and go! I liked the colloquial approach.
Cassie: Great craftswoman, each detail carefully elaborated,
Humanization of winter, as a woman, who is lulled to sleep by nature. The form of a lullaby is enforced by the enjambement structure. Interesting analogy with the tale of "Sleeping Beauty". Timid suggestion:"Sleeping Beauty" as the title of the poem.
Cacian-The (winter) season as a time of parcimony and respite.Suggestion;"I may have/a meaning"
Tailor- Powerfull language, chosing the "season of descontent" acoording to its elements of plague (eh, California!) not the time of the year. The surprising twist comes when the destructive acts of nature are linked to the acts of the short sightedness of men.Suggestion:"whirlblasts scouring the earth and everything before?"
Congrats all! And the winner is Cassie!
Congratulations, Cassie!
Congratulations Cassie Hughes ! and thank you Danik 2016. (thought I posted this already; hopefully not on the wrong thread.)
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
Thanks Danik, YesNo and Stateley. I am surprised but very grateful. :)
After much deliberation I think the next topic should be... Sheep!
p.s. Danik I think your suggestion of Sleeping Beauty as a title is great. Thanks.
We are too much like huddled sheep.
We count ourselves and go to sleep.
When we awake we act as one.
Applaud. Reject. What we get done
Is done because we did our best,
But sometimes we don’t pass the test.
Some smart ones think that they have got
Some edge until they know they’ve not.
Hehehe! Love it YesNo. What a great start.
“Nothing could be more impolite. To say, “Is your sheep genuine?”
would be a worse breach of manners.”
― Philip K. Dick, Do Androids Dream of Electric Sheep?
No Need for Sheep
the silicon man
has no need for sheep
his internal clock
transcends even sleep
wool gathering long
a thing of the past -
dreams of electric
sheep would seem miscast
2/21/2017
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
Ok, so we have two great entries so far but to make it a real contest we need a few more. I'll give you until the 15th of this month...
Just two more days to go...
I will extend this until the end of the weekend to see if we can get any more entries as two is not really enough for a contest IMO. So will close it at midnight (GMT) on Sun 19th.
C'mon guys! Lets see what you can do.
So it would seem that Sheep is not a subject that inspires people to get creative! It is a shame but obviously time to move on.
If I could I would declare a draw as both poems are so good but in order to continue the thread I must choose one. Therefore... for no other reason than it made me chuckle out loud I declare Sheeple to be the winner.
Congratulations YesNo :)
Congratulations YesNo !
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
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Thank you, Cassie Hughes and tailor STATELY!
The next topic is "water".
Deadline? April 4th, two weeks from now.
Congrats Yes/No.
Thanks, Danik!
"Water, water everywhere,
Nor any drop to drink!"
Coleridge, Rime of the ancient mariner
Summers Swell
Lazy sunshine
rains upon the
shore and sparkles
over horses running wild
atop tumbling waves.
Great entry! Now we need at least one or two more to make this a contest.
Upon the Waters... With Help From Vincent Van Gogh:
"For my part I know nothing with any certainty,
but the sight of the stars makes me dream."
The Ferryman
Embarks Through
Misty Fog
Waters A
Twilight Path
Into Enchanted
Bliss I
Leave The
World Behind
4/4/2017
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
The deadline has passed! Thank you for all the entries!
Cassie Hughes: Nice way to anticipate summer with sun, waves and horses running wild.
tailor STATELY: I like the path to bliss through misty fog.
Both entries are delightful. The winner is tailor STATELY. Congratulations!
Congrats, tS!
Thank you Danik 2016 and YesNo ! Loved the imagery in your poem Cassie Hughes.
Next subject: Silence
Deadline 2-weeks: midnight PDT April 20th
Congratulations tailor Stately and thanks for the compliment :)
Thank you, and you're welcome !
That noise is mostly silence
Like chatter in one’s mind,
Like giggling done by things that run
And wanting only to have fun,
But fun is hard to find.
I’ve let them have their freedom.
They like my well-stocked zoo,
I have no doubt they can’t get out.
Their thinking must be all about
How they can get me, too.
Too much "silence" (lol)... Less than a week to go ! Need more entries to make this a contest.
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
...Silence...
With every word left unspoken
They built a house of destruction
Screaming in silence
As they fulfill their penance
Yet remorse resounds hollow
From promises they just couldn't follow
Silence piercing their souls
From secrets left untold.
Silent Witness
There it sits
and stares,
accusing in its immobility.
Its smooth grey form
once pristine in its
sea polished state,
now marred by
rusted brown and
glutinous grey streaks.
What have you done?
it seems to whisper,
hushed amid the swell of tide.
What have you done?
But silence reigns.
There are no words
can give it back the
innocence of clean
and pure geology
it had before.
Before my hand completed
transformation,
from rock,
to weapon,
in one fell swoop.
A contest it is !!
Deadline: midnight PDT April 20th
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
My favorite lines:
YesNo*
… silence
Like chatter in one’s mind,
Like giggling done by things that run
stephofthenight*
With every word left unspoken
They built a house of destruction
Screaming in silence*
As they fulfill their penance
…
Silence piercing their souls
From secrets left untold.
Cassie Hughes*
But silence reigns.
There are no words
can give it back the
innocence
Well done by all... a difficult choice... but this round I give the nod to stephofthenight*
Congratulations to all on your wonderful entries !
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
Congratulations and very well done stephofthenight. :)
Congrats, stephofthenight!
Congratulations, stephofthenight!
Thank you :)
2 weeks from the end of this round would be May 4th...
“So this is how liberty dies…with thunderous applause.” – Padmé Amidala
Lets go with Liberty Dies as the topic and May the 4th be with you :)
Congratulations, Stephofthenight!
Although liberty dies
There’s a Moon that will rise
Casting moonlight below.
Oldish dreams fail to grow.
Patient stars ever will
Turn around but look still.
Evening Sun creeps to set.
We’ll eventually get
Some new day some may see
Although maybe not me.