mmm....okay, just a lil more.:D
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mmm....okay, just a lil more.:D
...heehee...I remember these days of laziness...have I returned to this?
So you think that love is just a game,
You never think about using that name,
Cause you've been stomped on,
Cheated on.
So now the only thing you believe in is the game,
You don't think love can change.
So you keep going through the motions,
Keeping your head away from the sun,
Jus trying to keep on going on...
To be so naive
To so much want to crave
Being too scared to pursue
The dream that everyone knew.
Rings a bell... more than one, in fact.
Really? Which ones?
Both poems sound similar to a few stories I know, and have been thinking to blog about, but I can't find the time http://fc02.deviantart.net/fs43/f/20...ma_normids.gif I already have time troubles with participating in light threads http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs24/f/20...8821b1770d.gif
:D You're welcome to use those poems if you want. :) They'll just sit here anywhere. They're not going anywhere...:piggy: :prrr: :goof:
welcome! just tell me when you finish first chapter!
Living a life of hell
yet not even an urge to yell
even when things fall
this time, it's giving it all
just to keep a smile on the face,
laugh if it's the case,
And yet, the heart hurts,
staying on the alert
not giving in for anything
nothing willl make the heart sing
because pain covers everything...
It's as though the person who wrote it was thinking about my condition, or a condition similar to mine. I wouldn't have been able to put it in better words. Thanks for unwittingly reading my mind :)
really? I didn't know...I guess we're in similar situations then :nod:Quote:
Originally Posted by Maximilianus
It seems we are.Quote:
Originally Posted by Beautifull
Are you okay?
I survived Saturday, which was a very bad day at the end of a very bad week. I think I can move on.
Yikes. Saturday is my favorite day...Aw you were sad in Saturday? Well, I hope Sunday was a better day for you. :(
I wish you happiness
...
:skep: I wonder if my powers are working right now! I'm working really hard on it! :D
Well, if that didn't work, piggy says hi!:piggy:
:lol:
It works! :)
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Yaya! I did it! :lol:
Beautiful, you stirred the moment and this proves now you have the craft to write poetry most of us are not endowed with. Poetry must pop up effortlessly, a jot down; to rephrase your own terms and you had the gift the one that is rare in this world of machinery minds. You can transport your reader to the serenity of mountains that make us forget this rat race for a while and get drunk in a dreamy world that snares us or enchants into a world that is half realQuote:
Originally Posted by Beautifull
Thank you so much. That means a lot, blaze. I really appreciate your complement. And I'm glad I have someone like you wh always is willing to read my works. :p :blush2:Quote:
Originally Posted by blazeofglory
Under the ray that sun transpires
bringing in all that love desires
what do we say?
Do we do what the heart may?
Living for the moment
Acknowledging all that love sent
And yet, still so lonely
only able to see
no touch, no smell of perfume
no sound, no passion to consume
how to live through a life full of pain?
Only by the people we call friend.
At times when we question our motives and life-paths, it's friends and loved ones who pull us through...:grouphug:Quote:
Originally Posted by Beautifull
Bright pieces, Beaut. Blaze is quite right in his definition of your talent, I agree :)
Thank you. :D I feel honored that I have such friends as these, because, truthfully, I couldn't make it without the friends around me. A life without friends is a lifeless life. :D I think that made sense..:lol:Quote:
Originally Posted by Maximilianus
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Originally Posted by Beautifull
Beautiful, there is wonderment in your poem and you have express the very depth of heart all beings seem to feel yet few could express. It really happens when one feels elevated by love yet the hard reality of the world that bars the lover from fulfilling the innate thing the heart craves
Blaze, you make me feel like a fraud, because I really do write these on the spur of the moment. And yet, the way you express my poetry, it feels as though I should've worked a long time on them. But I do feel honored that you say that I find what's deep in the heart...that may be true, because if you write a poem as a jot down, really, you don't think about what you actually said until you read back over it. Maybe that's how I am able to conquer what others cannot do...because I don't give my mind a chance to catch up what I'm spilling from my heart. :pQuote:
Originally Posted by blazeofglory
Abandoned,
I look for a way out of misery,
trying to find myself again,
yet the solution evades me
The only time I'm good at rhyming on the spot is when I'm writing poetry...why is that?Quote:
Originally Posted by Beautifull
It makes sense. Pity that not everyone sees the sense in it...Quote:
Originally Posted by Beautifull
I know about elevations, then diving with dead engines and ripped wings... more than I want to... and the epilogue is not the desired one for the crashing protagonist, especially when you haven't been provided a working parachute. Of course this depends on the story being told and the characters involved.Quote:
Originally Posted by blazeofglory
Then the spurs of your moments are quite... spurring :DQuote:
Originally Posted by Beautifull
Right! So many are blind to it because they are selfish! And crazy :crazy:Quote:
Originally Posted by Maximilianus
We all have times like that. That's the time to make a parachute out of all the good times and memories, and the support from your friends to make it out alive.:smile5:Quote:
Originally Posted by Maximilianus
Thank you! :pQuote:
Originally Posted by Maximilianus
I've been doing something like this lately. To some extent, it seems it's had some effect http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/sc...one-s_head.gifQuote:
Originally Posted by Beautifull
Welcome! http://smiles.kolobok.us/personal/hi.gifQuote:
Originally Posted by Beautifull
Well, I am glad it is helping you, the parachute. :pQuote:
Originally Posted by Maximilianus
It almost didn't open... but in the end I managed to convince it... and finally it opened :p Of course I'm just talking about one tiny part of my troubled recent life :p The thing is that lately, I haven't had a single chance to get bored http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/heat.gifQuote:
Originally Posted by Beautifull
Well, I wish I could give you some of my free time. It seems all I have is time lately. I feel like I should be using this time...but for what? There's nothing I have to do...I don't start college until the 23rd of next month...Quote:
Originally Posted by Maximilianus
then I'll be the one busy...:sick: homework is like the devil. :devil: It's a burden, yet it gives you the experience you need. Doesn't change the fact that I don't like it though...
And I wish you much happiness in your future. :D
I wish you much happiness in your future, too... and it's about time that you post another poem :)
lol. Okay...how about you give me a topic to work with. :) I want to try something a little different.
Let's talk about... stop the mourning... and getting payback... does it sound too vengeful? :p ..... http://smiles.kolobok.us/standart/sc...one-s_head.gif
lol. Yeah, but let's see if I can get a good poem from it! :D :pQuote:
Originally Posted by Maximilianus
Pain bubbling from the heart.
Never should have from the start.
Because my heart spun,
now I'm shunned.
'Cause my feelings were unreturned,
inside, my pain burns.
And now, I want them to feel it
the hurt that in me they lit
just to know that they suffered
from not wanting to be my partner,
would be enough to help me,
could ease this pain that won't let me be.
Man...I really....that poem really makes me think of my own pain...and the only reason I'd want them to be in the same situation as me would be just to know the other person does really care for me. That would be the only reason I would want them to feel pain...I am really sorry if there's no "vengefulness" in it...or getting payback...
Don't be sorry at all. It's a very nice and creative piece, and I was only kidding when I mentioned the getting payback part :p I'm not that vengeful anyways :)
Your fast creativeness reminds me of the fast creativeness of someone I haven't met in a long time. She's not often around anymore http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs17/f/20...y_Kermodog.gif