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Thanks Star. :)
REMEBRANCE reflects well of many countries where the war rages on and touches all of us in our meditation. Great poem!
JUNE reminds me of spring of my country and I am sure it is the same in your part of the world. June would be at the end of spring and at the beginning of summer. Warmth prevails already all around the country. Glimpse of hope!
THOUGHT ON THE BEACH reminds of the sea shore of Korea where I sat for a long time listening to the wave hitting the rocks. I always like to be alone on the beach, which is just my personal preference.
BE NOT CAGED DEAR HEART
Why ends with such prediction of "rust?" Why not keeping youthful ignoranceQuote:
Sing with joy, play a merry rhythm, for
Soon, who knows, those shackles might
Rust, the heart might sicken with poison.
And for love...it may be too late.
and illusion for a while longer?
I like all your poems and keep at it since you are good at it!
SHATTERING THOUGHTS brought back the time I spent with a good friend. We used to walk from one end of a city to the other end, chatting. I do not remember what we talked about, but it was delicious and it was a treasure I lost.
Did you find the title to this poem?Quote:
As i lie down to rest
my head is filled with thoughts
of future emotions and troubled past.
Sometimes eyes glisten,
tears forming on surface fighting for release.
Darkness overcomes,
And as i lie dreaming
My dreams are filled with thoughts
of future emotions and troubled past.
You seemed like having a restless night.
GOODBYE: Now you have written a poem about the person, you will not forget him?
We do not easily forget those who give such positive influence.
And now, I can't wait for June! Lovely.Quote:
Originally Posted by Niamh
Okay so this expression has been in my head the last day or two. While in work it popped into my head. suddenly i was writing down a poem and when i finished, i read it and i was a bit surprised. I cant help think of it as a bold statement. And i'm not sure about it.
But here it is. Please let me know what you think.
Is Mise Me Fein
Is mise me fein
I am no one else
Take me as I am.
All flaws, all warts,
All virtues, all passions,
I'll change for no one.
I am myself
I am no one else
Take me as I am.
My heart laughs with joy,
And it cries with sorrow,
I'll change it for no one.
Is mise me fein
I am no one else
Take me as I am.
You can either love me
Or you can hate me...
I'll change for no one.
I am myself
I am no one else,
Take me as I am.
All flaws, all warts
All virtues, all passions
I'll change for no one.
Is mise me fein
I am no one else...
I'll change for no man.
Wow! thanks so much for your feedback! :)Quote:
Originally Posted by jinjang
Lets hope its a nice june! :DQuote:
Originally Posted by ampoule
so Is Mise Me Fein meansd I am no one else? I like it niamh really do! :nod:
Is Mise Me Fein
Is mise me fein
I am no one else
Take me as I am.
All flaws, all warts,
All virtues, all passions,
I'll change for no one.
I am myself
I am no one else
Take me as I am.
My heart laughs with joy,
And it cries with sorrow,
I'll change it for no one.
Is mise me fein
I am no one else
Take me as I am.
You can either love me
Or you can hate me...
I'll change for no one.
I am myself
I am no one else,
Take me as I am.
All flaws, all warts
All virtues, all passions
I'll change for no one.
Is mise me fein
I am no one else...
I'll change for no man.
I think it is beautiful. I come a long journey to be where am I now and I expect to rest here and there and then put on my well worn boots - thankful that such scenic spots exist I reflect to make the changes I believe are needed to travel forward.
You wrote my heart with conviction. Thank you
It means i am myself. :)Quote:
Originally Posted by Nightshade
you are welcome. :)Quote:
Originally Posted by Delta40
So i've been rummaging around my room trying to sort some things out for my big move tomorrow and i came across a small browning slip of paper with a poem i scribbled on and dated 8/05/05. :)
So i thought i'd share it with you all.
Remember
When you have time to think
Remember i am there for you.
And every time your eyes blink
Remember i am there for you.
I understand that times have faultered
Friends may have drifted
Love may have aultered...
But dont forget those who care
For they are the ones whose love you share.
Remember true friends love is true.
Remember i am there for you.
'Is Mise Me Fein' I loved that one
(so do I)
Simple, and pretty. "Singelo", I'd say in Portuguese ... It's somewhat exquisite mixed with beautiful. With a touch of spontaneity~
lq
REMEMBRANCE::::
I liked that poem, each time I read it a different thought came to mind. The first time I thought of a broken heart and how one can become lost. The world around you crashes in destruction and you fight to get piece of mind.
Life so sad and lonely
Full of death an destruction,
Quite close to home, and only
Peace of mind is in construction.
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The second time I thought of the twin towers tragedy, how quickly it can all come to an end. A day to day way of living ruined in an instant.
Two towers that stood grand and tall,
Two gliding birds crash into a floor.
Thousands die beneath its fall
And bring the world into a war.
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The third time I thought of my childhood and remembered how cold kids can be. I wondered why I acted how I did, and why others I knew at that age acted as they did. Children it seems from my memory, are much colder and more evil than adults.
School kids mocked, teased and jeered,
Segragation within their neighbourhood,
In twenty years we may hear they've cheered
A saddened cry against a loss of childhood.
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Upon reading it one final time I thought of hope. That no matter how much wrong there is in the world, good will come of it in the end.
And with a band of heralds singing,
God his Angels shall he send.
Good poem, I really liked it. Is this style of writing what is known as a "three-stanza poem"?? ... My memory is terrible, but either way, I find it hard to write in that style. Great work :)
And I wondered if when you read it again after all that time, did you still believe in yourself? My interpretation is that you are reminding yourself you can always count on you! Your own strength to pull you through! That may be way off of course, still, I wanted to pop in to tell you I think the poem is terrific.
Remembrance was a poem I wrote back in 2001 to voice my anger at humanity over what are now historical events. The first stanza is my observation that there is too much strife and hatred in our world, and the only form of peace that is at all successful is peace of mind.
The second stanza is about the twin towers and the tragedy of it, my anger over so many deaths and my head telling me that the result was going to be war and more death... The third stanza is about a school in northern Ireland where, at the time, there were catholic school kids being refused passage up a direct road to the school from their homes by a protestant community. It angered me that sectarian crap would be taken out on innocent school kids.
My last stanza is me basically saying that we are going to be the downfall of our planet. The Heralds are a sign of the apocalypse if i am not mistaken. We will all be judged for our actions when the world ends.
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Originally Posted by Niamh
I've enjoyed all of your poetry, but this is the one that strikes a chord in my heart.
Really? I cant even recall the reason why i wrote that poem. I think it was for a friend who was going through a hard time. lost her mother the year before hand to cancer... and she was supposed to be travelling to NZ with a couple of other friends, but discovered they intended to ditch her when they got there... The irony of it all was that i ended up being the friend that got ditched in the end. Sometimes it doesnt matter how much you are there for someone...Quote:
Originally Posted by qimissung
That, unfortunately, is true.
I loved this poem, Niamh. I think that we could all learn something from your well put poem. Great job! :)Quote:
Originally Posted by Niamh
Hey Kiz! How are you? thank you very much for commenting. I'm starting to really like that poem. I think its kind of powerful.
Dear Niamh, hope you are doing well. my name is Ruddy Morfaw, i am 16 years old and i am a cameroonian by birth and i just registered as a member of this literature forum of the BBC. i've seen your poems and just wish to say that they are realy lovely and keep it up.
i'll be ending here.stay well. bye.
This is just a little limerick i wrote for Kilted while i was in Canada. :p
There once was a Scotsman named Drew
Who put too much wine in his stew
He felt a bit drunk
and fell off his bunk
and landed smack into his shoe!
:D