Whomever this was addressed to, you've sure fixed his or her clock! "Beep and dash and Hyphen too" - you really don't pull your punches, do you?Quote:
Originally Posted by Nightshade
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Whomever this was addressed to, you've sure fixed his or her clock! "Beep and dash and Hyphen too" - you really don't pull your punches, do you?Quote:
Originally Posted by Nightshade
I liked this very much, but I don't want to make you angry with me....
heh, :D
Thankyou all
This poem has now served its purpose so I will merge it with the rest of my poems.
No it hasn't! You haven't told us exactly what it's about / who it's aimed at!Quote:
This poem has now served its purpose
C'mon, give us a clue, you shady little tease...
NO one really, general plagiarists.
I follow an online novel that got pulled on Sunday following 7 counts of serious plagiarism ( someone decided they could self publish it on lulu for one ) so I am annoyed at that-
and other things.
Also I was proving a point to someone.
:D
and I hate to disappoint but I wrote it in less than a minute off the top of my head, ( see previous page for comment about unblocking my brain and poems beginning to pour out of every which where. Ok so there are specific reference that would mean specific things to certain people but I am not going into that.
and Beep and dash and Hyphen too well I actually swear like that in RL not infrequently. Although I also like the words Astrix Hyperbole and colon- semi colon .
:D
Ok, fair enough. That's good enough for me.
And well done on not swearing. I go through phases of thinking I should stop / cut down on expletives, but if never fking works...
as usal having issues with the puctuation and Im not completly happy with the ending so suggestions?
I might change the title to Isis song but maybe not.
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Last night I dreamed
I saw you dead
And buried far away
The dark earth wrapped
You cold and hard-
hid you from my gaze.
Far and wide
I crossed the earth
And searched
both high and low
But nevermore
I saw your face
And living tears flow
So though I hope
the dream’s untrue
I really wish you’d write
and tell me how
You do.
More of the morbid darkness... :rolleyes:
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Fatal insomnia
I can’t close my eyes! Its scary!
There I am alone
Cocooned in the dark
With the voices in my head
No one to hear me scream
So I glued my eyes open and
Blinded my self staring at the light
But I couldn’t sleep
And the delusions grew
Paradoxically I strove for Oblivion-
I died.