This form is intriguing! Kudos to the OP for posting it and I wish it success like the haiku threads :)
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This form is intriguing! Kudos to the OP for posting it and I wish it success like the haiku threads :)
Hi Pen, I just found this thread you started and since there are still a few weeks left to submit I'll give it a go, but it will take a little time. Looks very tricky. Only our Pendragon's clever noodle could come up with such a form! :)
O.K., Pen. I gave it a try. This turned out to be fun. Neat form.
Again paradise lost. Open gates closed. Once possible, it is now
Ending. Never renewed kisses, and
Again once spoken
Promises forgotten, and
Again once open
Blossoms closed,
And spring turned
Winter-like.
Is love perfect ever?
Ever perfect love is
Like winter
Turned spring, and
Closed blossoms
Open once again,
And forgotten promises
Spoken once again,
And kisses renewed, never-ending.
Now is it possible? Once closed gates open lost paradise again.
I'm seeing some great stuff here. Try it guys. You may find you have written one of your best poems. I am stunned by the talent so far. Amazing what you people have done with this form! Wow! http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l1...ane/inlove.gif
There is still plenty of time left for other entries. Any takers, please? http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l1...ane/Cheers.gif
I'm getting there Pen. A little at a time. ;)
I already threw one away. So I'll try again. Where in the world do you get those very cool GIFs?
Orion. I have Smiley Central downloaded. I chose the ones I really liked, sent them to my Photobucket account and copied the shortcuts. Took time, but it was worth it! http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l1...ilies/Rock.gif
You do indeed!:thumbs_up :p
You've got a million of them.. lol. Every single one you post is different from the last... so intereting :)Quote:
Originally Posted by Pendragon
This was cool! here we go..
Left then right turned once, and lightly warmed was enough
circles round flipped and set drifting high
floating, spinning, falling
table meets bread
rising low, and lay flat
brown around red, swims spread
thin green or white stripe
floats foam white, brown, toasted
vapor rising, breath
Pizza
Pizza
breath, rising vapor
toasted brown white foam, floats
stripe white or green,
thin spread swims red, around brown flat
lay and low rising
bread meets table
spinning, floating, falling
high drifting set, and flipped round circles
Enough was warmed lightly, and once turned right then left
:banana:
I must say the poets are quite good here. You are going to make my decision very difficult, which I consider Fantastic!http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l1...s/Appaluse.gif
Only four days left until the final day for submission. You can do it. Trust me! http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l1...ane/blinky.gif
I'll get mine in tomorrow Pen. It's on my computer at work. Just needs another quick edit.
OK, Pen. I worked on this long enough. Not sure if it's any good, but it was fun, in a difficult sort of way. ;)
Quote:
Once
Once, Red Knight rode lance pitched
Steeling his consanguineous neighbor
Lovely damsel, hair blonde flowing,
Sweetly talking, roughly riding.
Mysterious castle draped by fog
They lay, arms, legs, whispers
Until sun rising.
Vows love, marriage, lives
Together.
Together,
Lives, marriage, love vows.
Rising sun until
Whispers, legs, arms, lay they.
Fog by draped castle, mysterious.
Riding roughly, talking sweetly,
Flowing blonde hair, damsel lovely.
Neighbor consanguineous his steeling.
Pitched lance, rode Knight Red, once.