write or share a poem

Il Penseroso - love your poem, too. Toni thanks for the compliment. I did revise it a little when I posted it. It was based on truth.

Thanks, I appreciate it, but you give me faaaar too much credit.

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Originally Posted by Janine

Here's my try - a simple poem I wrote in time of sadness.



The teacup


the teacup arrived in the afternoon mail
a tiny box of mystery
carelessly, amid the rubble of newsprint

within
a beautiful printed teacup
it sits upon my table

illumined by morning sun
it greets me when I wake
and holds the emptiness of you

why have you sent me
this teacup,
an empy teacup?

perhaps this teacup saw other loves lost
other empty hearts
like mine


Janine 2003

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I like it Janine. Nice.

Gee, thanks Virgil. It is from the heart. I have been popping back and forth between this thread and Haiku tonight. This is a neat thread. Pink Floyd was just on TV so I had a hard time coming back to this, but now the concert is over.

:) Ok, since I got such decent reviews I will post another:

frozen summer

summer
lost forever
rain too often falls
or perhaps not often enough
with the promise of weeds

for you have left me
a distant voice ending
your last words stain me
I am numb in disbelief
I am frozen in winter once more

nothing is real
the garden is untouched
by human hands, weeds thrive
I cannot bear to look upon its horrid beauty
it blooms in spite of you and I

in spite of my neglect and turning away
butterflies come in abundance
as though to say “we survive”
...only because it is summer
but winter freezes my heart

Janine Summer 2003

Wow. I like this even better. You certainly put your emotion out in front. And that's not easy without becoming maudlin. I take it 2003 was a tough year for you Janine.

Very heartbreaking. I wrote about 6 of these poems...my tragic period. Glad you liked this one. Yes that's all me - heart on the sleeve. Soul was in that one and the garden is still unattended.:bawling: Used to be beautiful...oh well.

But the butterflies still love it!

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Originally Posted by Janine

Very heartbreaking. I wrote about 6 of these poems...my tragic period. Glad you liked this one. Yes that's all me - heart on the sleeve. Soul was in that one and the garden is still unattended.:bawling: Used to be beautiful...oh well.

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Well, you should start gardening again this coming spring. It will be time. Of course if you got the time.

Yes, I know. I live on a lake/pond and there are mosquitoes but I have to start up again. Thing is I let it go and the weeds really thrived. Tons of perenials and weeds!!!

A Beach Menagerie

At daybreak I approach the beach
across a soft hill of clover
past sleeping pandanus,
down a small sand dune
I am enveloped by seawind

I look up to a flight of swallows,
symbol of returning
occupying the airspace of seagulls
A kookaburra laughs
somewhere to land-ward

A malamute puffs up alongside me
pulling a lady along
on a long leash
If she had a small sled
she could mush along
this perfect white beach

Tall lady pines line the shores
their skirts, just out of reach
of sea water

Seagulls sit in small conventions
pecking free donuts
lining up for cups of coffee
I imagine their grey wings
tucked through Aloha shirts
A german shepherd loping,
wolf-like scatters them
They swoop out to sea, laughing
They'll be telling the folks back home
of their close call

Now the sun's rays have reached the high rises
awakening diamond fires from glass windows
Out to sea, sunbeams reach down in straight lines
like sun pictures from a storybook



© Suzanne Delaney

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Originally Posted by toni

No, I will be the #1 !

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since we are so close in mind and soul Toni, lets share the position:D

Good idea, fellow alien..:alien:

Here's a very brief prose poem I wrote (okay, just one sentence):

Days drag like a kitten on cardboard, warm fluff on the slick surface of solitude.

wow........