YesNo: A short, quirky piece that I definitely enjoyed. I liked your twist of humor and the way you portrayed mimes as not only performers but actual people. They often have to hide their emotions in order to appear cheerful for their audience. Its simple honesty made it beautiful.
jajude: To me this sounds like a poem written by a mime rather than about one. He is frustrated with his audience and longs for their applause and laughter. Your simple rhyme scheme created a rhythmic flow and at the end I wanted even more. Well done.
krymsonkyng: I have always found sonnets extremely difficult to write, but you have definitely pulled it off with this poem. This sounds like a lot of people I know, where they end up falling in love with their competitor. I liked “Any mime worth his stripes.”
hillwalker: For some reason this reminded me of the scene in the movie “Chicago” where Amos sings “Mr. Cellophane.” I with both surprised and intrigued by your unusual use of “centrifugal molecules.”
yuka: I never pictured a mime as a tightrope-walker, but you made it work with your descriptive imagery. “When he stands overhead / They become his mimes” took my breath away. Your second poem also possessed the simple beauty of a secret love. Great job.
Pendragon: You portrayed in your poem the sadness which can hide behind all them makeup. The first line “Trapped in a box” drew me in at once. I never thought about mimes in invisible boxes being trapped in them. Fascinating.
All of these poems were uniquely beautiful and I congratulate all who participated. However there was one that stood out even more than the rest, and I will have to give the title of winner to...
Dark Muse: Your poem was hauntingly elegant. You spoke more like a child frightened of the silent clowns than one amused by their silly antics. I especially liked “muted constructed reality.” The short lines and italics made it appealing to the eye as well. Beautifully done.
