Congrats, YesNo!
Interesting thought to look for anagrams... several of those would be chillingly perfect "titles" for the piece!
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Congrats, YesNo!
Interesting thought to look for anagrams... several of those would be chillingly perfect "titles" for the piece!
Thanks, tailor STATELY! And thanks Jaked, cacian and Pendragon!
The next theme for the minimalist contest will be "sunsets".
Deadline: August 15th
Golden Hour
Ravishing red
Ostentatious orange
Sizzling saffron
Pale pink
Descending daylight.
Thankyou Taylor, and congratulations YesNo!
The Happening
Beyond the hills
The sun drops
Like a new penny
Into a slot machine
The scattered clouds
Light up
Scarlet, Indigo, Gold
Green flash!
Jackpot
sunsets
your memory
makes darkness
bearable
Gold and purple
Fit for a king
Scarlet cloth
Fit for a prince
~~o~~~~ sunsets
daily tie-dyed
pastel skies
all too soon
dematerialize
mountains, vales
and prairies fade;
glaciers chill -
deserts defied
oceans drink
in exultation;
the sun retreats
in exclamation ˇ
7/29/2014
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dedicated to pk vaille on her birthday
happy birthday sis !
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY!
tailor STATELY thank you for the lovely feedback :)
sunset
runs red
above the clouds
spreads
yellow until
it is said
to turn
river
beds stead
shimmers above water
fled
to catch the med
as it sped.
life tournesol preds.
Before Turner
.
.
.
After Turner
Tonight, I wonder if that blush-
coloured swirl in the deepening bowl of sky
is Turner washing a sable hair brush
or Macbeth scrubbing clean ambition's dye.
YesNo I believe this is due :)
I guess the time is up. Thanks for the reminder, cacian.
I read through the list to see if I liked one better than the rest and I realized they were all pretty good. That makes it harder to judge, but it means you are all winners. So out of all the winners I need to pick one who will set up the next contest.
Dark Muse: I liked the last line with "descending" daylight.
MystyrMystyry: That is an unusual perspective of the setting sun like someone putting a coin in a slot machine and winning.
Jaked: A sunset reminds me that memory might be all that is left as well and helps the darkness remain tolerable.
Pendragon: Yes. The sunset colors are fit for a king or prince and we get to see them dressed up.
tailor STATELY: This was a very nice description of a sunset. I liked the inverted exclamation point and the use of the word "dematerialize" in the first stanza.
cacian: I liked your unexpected use of rhyme and also the word "tournesol" at the end.
blank|verse: Nice combination of two poems. Before Turner there's nothing. After Turner one gets something visible.
And the winner among all the winners who gets to set up the next contest is MystyrMystyry!
Congratulations!
Congrats, MystyrMystyry!
YesNo thank you.
congratulations Mystyr!!
Yes, well done, Mystyry.
Lots of good entries; I found Jaked's piece the most enjoyable. As for my own, the first is a bit of a literary in-joke: Oscar Wilde, when discussing how art transforms the ordinary, said something like: 'Before Turner there were no sunsets; before Dickens, there was no fog', so that provided the inspiration for the first very minimalist poem... and also meant I didn't have to write much!
Anyway - is there any chance of a new theme, Mystyry, to keep the competition rolling?
Thankyou YesNo :)
Amongst so many gems...
I've been in a rather existential frame of mind for the last few days - a transitional period if you will - so how about I theme the new contest The Here And Now?
The Here and Now--
Eternity--
Walk patiently,
Observing, see
All patiently,
Delightfully.
We talk about the here and now-
What if time itself is fractured
So that in the here and now
We are neither now nor here?
In the here and now,
I'm looking at a cow.
It's staring back at me,
I smile at it with glee.
2d or not 2d
Put away your 3D glasses
Exist -
(Eliminate the noise)
Dance
within the holographic
manifold of mind
8/27/2014 r.8/28/2014
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
Looking good so far crew!
One week to go...
Excellent entries!
YesNo, a meditative approach no less. The use of the word 'eternity' in such a small space, and within the theme, has a striking impact of contrast, as does the repeated 'patience' - that life will flow and continue on.
Pendragon, your word play with final inversion is fun, with a philosophical element, what if time is indeed fractured?
mal4mac, brief and a rhyme, with perhaps more to it that at first seems - who is watching whom? Why not both?
tailor STATELY, captures the freedom from technological entrapment quite well I thought. We buy these toys of wizardry, but are they a substitute for life, or is life a substitute for them? Clever title too.
Tricky, and much a tie for first place, but after some consideration I'm drawn to Pendragon's submission for its self-containment, complete-within-itself aspect.
Ah they're all good, and in choosing a winner it means there won't be an entry from them until at least the end of the next round but the winner for this one is Pendragon! Congratulations!
Congratulations Pendragon ! and thank you MystyrMystyry !
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
Thanks, MystyrMystyry!
Let's try the word "twilight" cunningly describe in as few lines as possible. Deadline September 30. Good luck and God Bless
Twilight, not bright,
Not dark, just right.
Moonlight tonight
Calms sight: twilight.
Color Me in Twilight
You paint me in indigo,
exploding hues of red,
left among apocalyptic orange,
a stroke of subtle tones
of intensifying yellow.
Twilight
Surrendered
breathless afterglow
Twilight kisses
good night
Final ?
twilight
takes over the solar
the sky is
polar
white is oh my.
Sorry, I've been having a rough time with my bi-polar. It's hell sometimes to just be me.
Anyhoo-- JAKED-- you're up. Congrats, good description, very few but poignant words!
Woohoo! Thanks Pendragon! I enjoyed all of the entires!
Next topic: wonder.
Deadline in 2 weeks, 10/24.
I wonder why I turned up here:
Blue sky, green grass, a mind less clear.
from wonder to wonderful
to think is to perfect rule.
Just two entries? Let's have one more week... Submit your entries this week - I'll judge on Halloween. Boo!
Wonder
Wandering
Wavering
Wish
What
Who
Where
When
Why
Wonder
Why
Wonder
sparks
Wonder
driven
Wonder
full
Wonder
No wonder
I don’t believe:
there is
no wonder.
I don’t believe
there is.
No wonder?
I don’t believe.
I wonder
about thunder
Heightening
with lightning
And the pain
of rain
Great entries!
YesNo: Your piece appropriately left me wondering why I’m here – and how I got here! I like the playfulness between the idea of a blank mind and one less clear…
cacian: I'm intrigued by “to think is to perfect rule” - will have to ponder that some…
Pendragon: What an enjoyable train of thought – I especially like the multiple ways you can read the ending.
Delta40: “Wonder sparks” – I want some!!! “Wonder driven” - would that we all were! “Wonder full”!!!
blank|verse: Both silly and profound – wonderful!
MystyrMystyry: “The pain of rain” – many ways to read this: for some reason made me wonder about rain feeling pain - being so close to lightning must hurt!
There can only be one winner, though, so on this spooky day it goes to …
blank|verse!!!
Congrats! Your prize, to share with everyone … this quote from Einstein:
“The most beautiful thing we can experience is the mysterious. It is the source of all true art and science. He to whom this emotion is a stranger, who can no longer pause to wonder and stand rapt in awe, is as good as dead: his eyes are closed.”
- Albert Einstein
Thanks Jaked, and congratulations to everyone who entered. :) And thanks for the Einstein quote - it puts me in mind of Wallace Stevens's famous introduction to his poem 'Man Carrying Thing': 'The poem must resist the intelligence | Almost successfully' - the effect of doing which, of course, is to put the reader into a state of wonder and awe, something Stevens's poetry does to me on a regular basis.
Anyway, on to the next competition. If I may, I'd like to suggest something slightly different. Instead of a theme, I would like people to rewrite an existing poem, by a published poet, but reduce it to its bare minimum. Create a minimalist version of a favourite or famous poem - one of Keats's odes perhaps, or an Emily Dickinson poem, or The Waste Land - I'm sure you get the idea and don't need me to tell you other famous poems. But I think I'd look more favourably on contemporary poems by living poets; in this case, providing links to the poems would be good, if possible, as I might not have read the original.
I'd also suggest not being too flippant by reducing poems to a single word - unless you've got a very good reason - or submitting one on Dante's The Divine Comedy that reads 'Hell, Purgatory, Heaven' or similar. Try to use the words in the original poem but create a new and imaginative minimalist poem in its own right. I hope that makes sense!
In short - a minimalist version of an existing poem.
Deadline: Saturday, 22nd November, 2014.
Good luck! b|v