The world is no more.
The bed spins and I must pee.
I'm just drunk again.
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The world is no more.
The bed spins and I must pee.
I'm just drunk again.
im just drunk again
how did that happen anyway
i just went for one
I just went for one
But returned with many.
Something has changed.
[So] Something has changed
Attachment detached. Let loose
Euphoric feeling
Euphoric feeling
Eastern horizon gives life
Volition driven
Volition driven
By the language of freewill
Just a mix of words
yes?
s10cr
I accidentally pressed send after the first line....!
just a mix of words
communication a joke
no wonder its art
No wonder its art
When other subjects cower
From confrontation
from confrontation
comes understanding others
and acceptance
(you okay today? seem to slipping keys all over the place? :))
No, I'm OK? How about you? (your last line is missing a syllable... now what exactly do you want me to do about that?:))
and (1) ac (2) cep (3) tan (4) ce (5)
eh? does not work for you?
and im doing well thank you!
and ac cept ance
1 2 3 4
I'm afraid it doesn't work for me, no. But anyway, let us suppose it is 5 syllables
And acceptance
Is a reaction to life
And experience
lol...sorry bout that...i'll try harder next time. im only on my first coffee today so far....
I know what you mean about coffee. It is the beverage of revolution. I could only get decaffeinated at the local rail station this morning! Can you imagine? I mean where would Che Guevara be today if he'd only had decaf? :)
omg!! only decaf? you poor thing. i will immediately send you an injection of fabulously caffeinated coffee from our own special Tim Hortons.
oh and because this is the haiku thread:
And experience
is the only way to learn
i am so smart
Thanks.
I am so smart (....)
Art cannot keep up with me
I’m light years ahead.
I'm off now. Its been fun haiku-sparring with you. Ah the end of a working day. It smells like coffee with hazelnut syrup is awaiting me somewhere in commuter-space. Have a nice and pleasant day, if your work is just beginning. Farewell for now....:)
might be possible
understanding is vague
previous haikus
should we have a space where we can explain the roots of our constructs? Or, should the continuum blindly stumble along its preordained course
you are free to ask for explanations at any point anywhere. which part of the above haikus were confusing?
previous haikus
have made a mess out of
baddad's brain space
Fine! The lit snob in me is just being a little cranky. I'm finding some of the recent 'Haiku' atempts less than ........................literay? Less than..... 'poetic'? Less than......inspiring, challenging, heartfelt, meaningful, poignant, soulful, artful or justified as 'Haiku'?
I think I'll just apologize now, find a new thread, leave you folks in peace...........good hunting..........BAddad.
i gotta tell you baddad, sometimes the haikus present an opportunity to engage in whats called communication. i spelled that slowly in case you alien leaders didnt teach you that before they sent you here. i apologize if my haikus werent up to your standards, but these boards are above all else, a method of communicating with other people and having a bit of fun.
and if you go around criticizing other people's poetry (which is so highly personal in its construction and interpretation) they may be tempted to just not post any more poetry or tell you to take a donut and um....leap at it.
peace and love my friend, as always
baddad's brain space
communication hiat-
us. let's scream, shall we?
:)
edit: i like how the word hiatus is interrupted, too. hadn't noticed the symmetry of that.
us. let's scream, shall we?
silent assemblies await
infusion now. NOW!!!!!
Infusion now. Now!!!
But there is no addition
And no greater strength
us. let's scream, shall we?
with our feet in wet cement
it's a short boat trip
( I am from NJ after all.)
My goodness you guys are quick.
<<<Pickles, when you go to "new posts" make sure there are no pages left unread. that's all. (see dates & times of last few posts.)>>>
Quote:
Originally Posted by amuse
yeah, the egg is on me.
Its a short boat trip
To see where Sisyphus is
Return ticket's best.
Dear Den,
Let me read some Haiku poems written by you.
Thanking you a lot,
Yours Faithfully,
Gyanendra Gaur
Return ticket's best
If the turner faces back
To the joyous sun
To the joyous sun
we turn, eyes widening in
ecstasy of light.
-K
ecstasy of light
in my eyes as well as heart
a day of surfing
a day of surfing
tired, burned, but truely glad
contentment fills me
contentment fills me
like dinners with nana like
songbirds at dawn
*missing a syllable because nothing sounds right when **tampering.
**as opposed to tinkering.
Songbirds summon dawn
transition of dark to light
dreaming souls gently aroused
hm. maybe(?) you didn't care for how i ended with "songbirds at dawn" but we build off of each other's last line...though i didn't find a 5th syllable that i liked, and wrote 5-7-4, which was technically incorrect - haikus are 5-7-5.
glad to see this thread around more! :)
Dreaming souls gently aroused.
Real world calling upon them:
"Come with me, with me"
Quote:
Originally Posted by amuse
Hey there. No offence intended!! I was just putting it back into 5 syllables, that was my first ever Haiku so..dunno..just wanted to do it right. I guess Songbirds at dawn, has quite a different meaning than mine......
So this one is for you...
Songbirds at dawn
So happily they twitter
Amused with their song
it was? and you wrote it here, that's wonderful!
ohhhhh! how sweet of you. thank you. :)