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I'm new here - just found this site. Love this thread - have played a game like this via email and really enjoyed it! Hope to be a regular. That introduction out of the way, my first submission. Enjoy! [cue drum roll...]
[indiscretion]
chocolate slivers melt the sting
of her betrayal;
succor grief’s stomach knots;
sate Temperance.
jake
Welcome to litnet Jaked !
Excellent first posting.
Look forward to more of your writing.
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
Welcome Jaked! I expect you'll become a regular here as I now am :)
Salivating
.....with hungry eyes.....
wanting.....
.......just a taste
Hello! I hope I can also participate!
my empty stomach gives way
to my empty heart today
in this summer morning
is she really gone?
Interesting work you guys. I'm lazy, so no commentary.
Pen, your turn.
Caught me off guard there! Thank you.
How about Mother Nature, perhaps in the sense of surviving even after all man has done to trash this world. A few carefully chosen words are better than many. June 15 is the deadline. Good luck.
The world lives,
so it has and so it will,
despite your phlegm.
Prayer to Mother Nature
Mother Nature may you see
All the good you'd want from me.
Rather than dancing in the rain
It rains when she dances.
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Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
… and somewhere under the concrete
and cement and asphalt and steel and glass,
under the weary pavements and jaded streets,
the wasted buildings, the throttled cars and trucks,
she lies in awaiting, uncomplainingly,
she hopes and dreams and sighs in pain…
… and time, time, time her faithful lover…
She Remembers
Sorrow lingers
with deep impenetrable scars,
who still hears?
A voice long forgot
but resiliency trembles,
she is the one who
will not forget.
Pained love
becomes shadowed
in anger.
Her waking wrath
soon, poor ungrateful
dears.
She will swallow
back into the womb
and life begin anew.
As there seems to be no more entries, the judging starts:
jajdude To tell you the absolute truth, I have no idea where you are going with this poem. And please remember that this is only one man's opinion.
YesNo Nice little couplet!
tailor STATELY I kinda liked this. Interesting choice of font!
Dark Muse As usual, you poem just echoes with vibrant color and sound!
But we can have one winner only ahd that is:
DieterM Your poem really made a statement and was exactly what I was looking for! Congrads! You deserve them! And you're up next!
Congrats DieterM, I enjoyed your poem as well!