Poetry Contest

Toni, welcome and certainly join in. It is fun. Bascially I am still an observer, but it will be interesting to see new talent in here. The poems so far have been really great! Can't wait till a new photo is picked. Hope to read one of yours soon.

Thanks, Janine! I can't wait for the next photo either... Hope it won't take long..

Alright, I'm sorry to have kept you waiting. Life has been a bit hectic for me lately. Janine I was only joking about actually hating my life. When I’m under a great deal of stress my mind becomes a bag of noodles. Anyway, yes Hesse is one of my favorite writers, and the quote is from Demian. :)

I am not going to over-comment on the poems. Just briefly highlight some points to preserve each one’s integrity. This, as always, was a difficult decision. I take off my imaginary hat to you all--you did a fantastic job. Poetry is a painstaking art, I know that. There will be no negative comments from me by the way, only happy thoughts. However, what I was specifically looking for was a cold anguish omnipresent in the painting. The nothingness, the representation of Christ as the suffering of mankind. Etc.

And now…

MIR- your poem was great. Short and sweet with undertones of foreboding. “Empty Eucharist...lay your burden down.” Very nice. Kudos.

PETRARCH- descriptive, beautiful, story-like, holding true to your style. Capturing an anguish evident in the painting--As the Son lowers his head over the bending world.

Unseen nails suspend incarnate anguish
While the bones snap and muscles tear
And the neck, limp with suffering, drops the head.
[Awesome descriptions.]

FEMME- welcome to the poetry contest. good job on your first entry: pretty, very hymn like. It was very sweet and it rhymed, which was cute and refreshing.

He floats softly
In vast skies of gray
Because He made a sacrafice
On the cross where He lay.


TALIESIN- Interesting and pretty well done. I especially liked your spurts of rhyme in the middle. Oh, and "where the hell is my left foot?"ßlol.

Last chance of
bading goodbye
to the blue skies
which won't be here tomorrow.
Sunset of the world.
The Son is free.

RIESA- mmmmm. Beautiful. Every line is quotable, that’s what I like. Descriptions are rich. Nice rhythm, as well. Very, very well written. Oh, and there is the overtone of writhing anguish that I was looking for.

and
forget to sing as
blades dig, scrape earth and tender flesh,
flesh bathed in war's craze,
hate in hot and sultry waves,
the grim disdain of God's soldier
meting out ordered death.

In the colloquial language of my peers, I must say “word.” to this poem. If you don’t know what that means, it’s ok. It means I think it’s fantastic.

VIRGIL-Also a fascinating, very well written poem. Excellent descriptions, also all quotable. You, mi amigo, are a poet. I like the thought pattern in this one, and the conflict Christ is having with himself.

No, the flesh is gone, but the rivet remains.
The spinning earth, the expanding universe,
The hills are fixed to earth.

Yes, that’s all we have, isn’t it? Great job.

Wait, so who wins this one?

There are no rankings or winners or losers in poetry. :p

Congratulations, you all win. :bday_2:

But I would like Riesa to pick the next picture. :thumbs_up

Thank you Holograph. That was fun!! All poems were very good. It would have been tough to judge, and i'm glad it wasn't me. Pick a good one, Riesa.

I agree, every entry was fantastic. It was PL's that I wanted to talk about. :blush:


That excerpt you took out was good, Holograph, and there were so many ideas there . . . one of the first things that struck me about the picture was the lack of the INRI on the cross - for some reason or another, so I was excited that she mentioned it. :D

Maybe I'll just send you a PM Petrarch's Love. :)

I look forward to attempting to participate in the next contest. Hurry up and pick! :)

Congrats Riesa! And great job everyone else too. I sympathize with the difficulty of Holo's judging task. Looking forward to the next pic.

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That excerpt you took out was good, Holograph, and there were so many ideas there . . . one of the first things that struck me about the picture was the lack of the INRI on the cross - for some reason or another, so I was excited that she mentioned it.

Maybe I'll just send you a PM Petrarch's Love.

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Thanks for showing the interests, David. I'll initiate the new option of opening ancillary threads for commentary by starting up a thread for my poem for this round where you and anyone else with a mind to can comment and question. It would be great if some of the other entries wanted to similarly start up threads so we could continue discussing this really good batch of poems even as we move into the next contest round. :)

WooT! nice job, Riesa, and everybody else!! and welcome to all the new people joining this thread; it's really exciting to get some new poets.

Petrarch, that's a very good idea about posting the poems on new threads - i'll start a thread on mine, and anybody can comment or bash it all they want. :D

also, Holo, those were lovely critiques. thank you.

all of the entries were amazing, it was a difficult image to write on. Thanks for the comments, holo, and entrusting me with choosing the next picture.

I'll try to make the new image as challenging as holos. I'm looking forward to all of the new contestants entries too, and I foresee a difficult decision ahead of me.

Congratulations all! Good job. Some great works!

Oh, yes yes yes, I'm very interested. It's just things to do, little time and... may I say I don't dare participate for I think Xamonas' poem is unbeatable. Waw I like it so much, it was a real delight.
I continue reading you all. It's really a pleasure.
Laura

Oh, yes yes yes, I'm very interested. It's just things to do, little time and... may I say I don't dare participate for I think Xamonas' poem is unbeatable. Waw I like it so much, it was a real delight.
I continue reading you all. It's really a pleasure.
Laura

I don't understand what's happening: I'm trying to reply to another thred and I find my messages here!
:crash:

Well, I'm new and I hope you help me with this forum.