YesNo
I liked this for the deftness of the rhymesQuote:
It was Valentine's Day when she said
It'd be better if I woke up dead.
"Drop dead, baby," she cooed,
"That was poisoned." I chewed--
Yes!--then swallowed the fate I was fed.
Delta40
Ugh! You didn’t pull any punches, did you?Quote:
I'm Already There
My heart beat
erratic in the extreme heat
as I opened the card
that played 'Happy Valentine's Day'
like a chipmunk gone horribly wrong.
Those three words spat:
'Go To Hell!'
The tomcat sprayed his hate on me.
I slithered across the floorboards,
varnished in my own pungent sweat
to sink eternally under the tepid waterline
of my limescaled bath.
Jerrybaldy
Hell, if this had been a competition for the best 4 word, 5, 6, 7, 17-word kiss-off, you’s have won in all the categories!Quote:
She was clipping her big black toe
the gothic varnish
covered her foot fungus
and her milky white nail
in flawless perfection.
I gave her a red rose
but she wanted
those three words
'I love you haunted.'
I am a free spirit
I ripped the rules
and went in with four.
'Don't be a twat'
she offered back
with a screw driver in each hand.
'Both for you'?
'You want one'?
'Would rather choke'
'Could be arranged'
'Go fu ck yourself'
'Would last longer'
'You can't write'
'You're no poet'
'Lets get divorced'
'We got married'?
'Its poetic licence'
'Now this poem is too long'
'There aint no pleasing you'
'What happened to three word phrases'?
'Life's too short'
'Like your manhood'
'fancy a screw'?
'Only a driver'
'I am pissed off with three word phrases and I am now going to write a really long line just to annoy you'.
'Polish your head'
'Have I written 'wasteland yet'?
'I have no idea as my ADHD means I am no longer reading'
' I need no audience'
'Why do you post your crap on here then?
'I don't know'
'Fancy a swim?'
'Which way to the sea, Jane'?
soundofmusic
Great humour in this but I couldn’t find the three-word insult that Haunted required.Quote:
BROKE A****ED LOVE
I get broke a**** love nearly every night
if he's not at the club startin' a fight
Or stayin' with some b****ch that I don't know
or basin' crack with one of his hoes
Now my friends think it lame that I'm sharin' a man
but he's handsome and ripped and has a tan
He may not have money or livin' means
but a broke a****ed man can always make you scream
DocHeart
Ouch! A fine dose of heart-ache in this one.Quote:
Valentine
I never got to see the roses.
The girl just said, “don’t worry,
They’ll look beautiful.”
I sat behind my desk thinking of her face
As she thanks the delivery boy
And slips him a fiver
And holds the roses
Like a baby to her chest, thinking
The bastard won’t leave me alone.
At night I disappear into a glass
And read her message from within
My personal, deeply submerged
Blurry vessel.
“Never again, love.” she writes
And depths unknown are there
To be explored
Again.
And the prize goes to........JerryBaldly for being the best-groomed, most loquacious and all-around most stinging response!
