i am wanting to show a poem to someone, i really want to show him this last one i wrote on here..is there anything you think i should change before i show it to him? its this one:
Amazing
I'm beggining
To love this word
When I read it,
My heart flutters
I feel
For that slight moment,
Cared for
And my thoughts,
Are less cluttered
I'm really liking this guy...
He seems to understand
And care,
He seems so sweet,
Kind and smart
And what he says to me..
I read it and,
My heart smiles,
Even for that slight moment,
I read what he says,
And I melt
When you step outside,
And the bright sun hits you
For that slight moment,
You seem to feel that warmth
On the inside, you feel it
For that moment,
Then its gone
When I read those few words
From him...
Its like the sun
Hitting me, but
Longer then just a moment
Or two
And when he says it hurts him,
To know how I feel inside,
I just want him to stop hurting
For me, I want him to be happy
I want to discover who I am,
Maybe I will with his care,
In his words...
