Originally Posted by
Nossa
Wow! I sure never thought a poem I write would lead to such discussion...lol
Anyways, I wanna clear something up, I write what sounds right to me...I don't know if this is right, but this is poetry to me. So if it's 'out loud', 'spears' or repeating and then finding out that removing the repitition sounds better, it's all about how I feel the poem that I wrote. If I don't feel anything when re-reading my poem, then I've done a lousy job.
I'm glad you guys seem to find it a good and interesting poem, and even worthy of such a great discussion...:D