*Le Gasp* Lily Adams Has Written Poetry!

Marvellous,marvellous, Lily! The sonnet is just great. I can only repeat what the others said.
The other poem is very very very good! Wonderful way of commenting the ''my way is better than yours'' self-centred idea. I loved it! I especially like the

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''You look through your glasses and the rest of the world looks at them.”

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verse which is astonishing and which goes perfectly for an end!!! I am talking very seriously when I say you should go on writing poems. Your style will improve with each poem you write! And this is a great start!

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My way is better than your way because someone told me so.

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so brutal but true! you're a new modern poet! This age is talking through you! LOVELY!

Aw, downing, thank you sooo much! When I have to write, I really try, but I'm an artist. That "you look through your glasses" line was stolen, I didn't make it up. That's why it's in quotes. But thank you. :D I love that line and it's a great summary. But your comments are probably the best I've ever got from people about anything that I've done. Thank you. I want to speak out about the world. But through my drawings.

I too think this is beautiful, Lily. In my experience, I've seen extremely good poetry coming from someone who usually finds expression in some other way.

I know a painter in Rhode Island who writes the way he thinks for painting, and the results are astounding.

Give us more, when the spirit moves you. Thanks.

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Originally Posted by Lily Adams

Hey everyone, I wrote another poem type thing. I have to write a Greek Chorus on a "current event". Again, I have no clue how to write a poem except a fairly decent sonnet. I don't have backround and I don't know the rules. Sorry.

So, while contemplating what I should write about, I thought, "I don't want to do something common like global warming." I wanted to think outside the box.

So I thought of fundamentalists. You know, "my way or the highway".

Heavily inspired by Jihad Jerry and the Evildoers, so that means it's controversial.
http://www.mineisnotaholywar.com/

http://i198.photobucket.com/albums/a...jihadjerry.jpg

"My Way"

Pretending to see, hear, and speak no evil; seemingly pure and white.
Yet still forcing opinions and their bias.

Controlling and manipulating your mind so subtly via mass media.
My way is better than your way because someone told me so.

Death, pain, and suffering is rampant because of “my way”.
Sunni versus Shi'ite,
Believer versus non-believer,
My way of life versus your way of life.

My way is better than your way because someone told me so.
I am special and you are not.

Humans are naturally irrational, but remember:
“You look through your glasses and the rest of the world looks at them.”





So I'd like some advice...additions, corrections, etc. You know the deal. Gotta print it up by tomorrow, though.

I'm also making a really neat drawing/collage thing to go with it. I feel so inspired...

Gerald Vincent Casale FOR PRESIDENT.

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I'm glad Downing brought this back up and yikes! I just spilled my guts on Blaze's poem about being 'see, hear, speak no evil'. Does honest confession count for anything? ;)
I like both of your poems here and I like the way you think outside the box. I would love to see that collage. Do you ever post pictures of your work?

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Originally Posted by firefangled

I too think this is beautiful, Lily. In my experience, I've seen extremely good poetry coming from someone who usually finds expression in some other way.

I know a painter in Rhode Island who writes the way he thinks for painting, and the results are astounding.

Give us more, when the spirit moves you. Thanks.

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Aw, geez, you guys, thanks!

No, thank YOU!

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Originally Posted by ampoule

I'm glad Downing brought this back up and yikes! I just spilled my guts on Blaze's poem about being 'see, hear, speak no evil'. Does honest confession count for anything? ;)
I like both of your poems here and I like the way you think outside the box. I would love to see that collage. Do you ever post pictures of your work?

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That's what I was going for. :D

Thank you!

Here it is: http://i198.photobucket.com/albums/a...c/MyWay2-1.jpg

But later after that was taken I wrote in pen "patrolling the streets with all of their friends, bashing you around trying to make you like them" on it which is a line from an Oingo Boingo song-"What You See".

I have also since then evolved with my art skills. :blush: I kinda still suck at arms, though.

I wrote this sonnet a month back or so for English class:

Soft static behind vinyl music played,
Ancient magazine pages faded pale,
Old fashions of the best quality made,
Things that to others have gone all too stale.
The fact that there were others before you-
A star’s light requires time to get here,
Reading books is traveling through time, too-
Gaze upon a gravestone; think of their fear,
My way of life and thought is obsolete.
I never belonged here, that’s something sure.
Time confusion is something I can’t beat,
Past to the future my warps have no cure.
Connection to another dimension,
Current living is not my intention.