You´re right, it´s incongruous. Made some changes in the poem above
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You´re right, it´s incongruous. Made some changes in the poem above
Love the changes :)
Fog
Dank and wet
Beclouds my senses
I enjoy its obscurity
A misty haze
6/4/2022
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
Interesting poem!
Going global
If here the sun shines
and there it rains
And on the
other side of the planet
snow and ice abound
what is the weather today?
Enjoyed your question poem :) Global weather today: is droughts/floods/snows/rains/haboobs/hails/sleets/tornadoes/tropical depressions/etc
Revised my latest poem above due to a bit of redundancy:
Fog
Fog…
Its dankness
Beclouds my senses
Though I enjoy its obscurity
A misty haze
6/4/2022 r.6/6/2022
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
Thanks. I prefer the first version of "Fog", it seems more intuitive ( less explanatory) to me. If you allow me the boldness of a suggestion:
Fog
Dank and wet
Beclouds my senses
wrapping them
in a misty haze
I enjoy its obscurity
Tentatively
Footprints in the sand,
traces of words
Outlined vultures
fleeting lights
where, oh where
has my memory
gone?
Quite existential... enjoyed the metaphors. I like your take on Fog.
cherry blossom
bright
a lazy day
a cherry blossom upon
a young lady falls delicately
light
6/7/2022
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
Marvelous mounds
majestic mountains
magnificent mesas
Missed this one Dark Muse... enjoyed :)
malaise and ennui
malaise and ennui
they shackle me
without my dreams
8/13/2022
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor