Minimalist Poetry Contest

Like This v. That

Like pistol duel v. every dawn
Like Holy Father v. fallen son
Like two pistols v. the two be one
Like sure shot v. ‘ever gone

Some say the choice is either-or
But others claim both-and.
Still others opt for neither-nor
Perhaps to bribe the gods for more
Than most can understand.

Luv it ... and with the title of YesNo, you should automatically win every duality duel, barring an entry from Maybe.

duality sides
both rank and mind
it is perfect sign
for health and time

Thanks, Hawg Horse! I actually was thinking of yours trying to imitate the "v." between the options while writing the "-".

Good and Bad
Jekyll and Hyde
Frankenstein or his monster
Which is alive?
Angel or Devil
Maybe both. Who knows?
Somewhere in my mind
My duality glows...

Pendragon

Great entries so far, deadline Feb 15

time's up right?

Yes, I had meant to try and get the juding done today but got caught up in other things, so I will try to do it tomorrow.

Ok thank you all for the entires

Hawg Horse: I really like the concept of this one. It was interesting and quite different though I did think that the use of pistols twice was a bit redundant and it made the 2nd line "Like Holy Father v. fallen son" feel like it was out of place since all the other verses revolved around guns and shooting.

YesNo: I really enjoyed this one, it had a bit of playfulness to it and a good flow. I really enjoyed the last two lines and thought they brought the poem together nicely.

Pendragon: I really liked this one, I enjoyed the Jekyll Hyde reference. I also like the way in which it is kind of a riddle proposed to the reader. The last two lines I thought were great.

And the winner is.........

cacian: I really enjoyed this one, and I think it captured the essence of minimalism very well. There is a great deal said within these few lines. Really liked the concept of the poem.

Congrats cacian. Praise from Dark Muse is no small feat. I liked your entry, as well.

Thank you both very much :)

And the new topic for this minimalist round is:

sensibilty

Good luck :wave:

He's sensible, still he has fun.
When he freaks out and pulls out his gun,
With a rata-tat-tat
All the bad guys go flat
And the worst get more holes than just one.

No Real Mystery

Every Yearbook reads the same:
Sensibility, “most likely to financially succeed”
Why Be, “most everyone’s favorite fantasy”

When you raise your middle finger
do not do it in vain.
Go into a private room
and test your own prostate.

winner, winner, winner

Sense and Sensibility

Sensibility is doing what others think makes sense
Ignoring all your own ideas and thoughts
One day you learn you've become the slave
Of those who claim to be in the know
Test their theories, search the scriptures,
Investigate the claim that they know what is best
Search your feelings, think it over carefully
Your own sensibility then will make more sense

Pendragon
(Copyrighted material)

anymore entries anyone haha:)

Actors can play any role
without paying price or toll

I doubt there's much sense in us,
but sure there's much defense in us

and the time's up and the deliberation are as follow:)

YesNo : I enjoyed your piece especially:

With a rata-tat-tat
All the bad guys go flat
there is almost tapping sound in it and the humour is great! the 'bad guys' reminded me of the 'big bad wolf' for some reason.

cafolini : the first piece a real eye-opener and thank you for putting it so cleverly. Poetry is clever. the second short and to the point.Very telling.

Pendragon: I enjoyed the expressions and the wisdom behind it. Very nice. I also liked the title. A Jane Austen twist is cool.

jajdude: An absolute cracker. Short and sharp. Very well done

I have enjoyed all entries and they are all first winners to me but there could only be one and the winning goes to
cafolini for the message delivered in the piece.
Many congratulations cafolini !!!:seeya:

Thanks so much. Certainly, some of the other writings were also winners. I am only glad to win this because I am a minimal speaker in almost anything I write. I think the art of the minimal is to spell a few lines that contain a subject for further research and motivate that research wherever possible.
Thanks to all the winners who participated. Here is a present from my private reserve:

CONSEQUENT HISTORY

Anyone that ever wanted to fly
Had someone backstage warning about the perils of gravity.
Anyone that ever wanted to swim
Had someone backstage warning about the perils of currents.
Anyone that ever wanted to dance
Had someone backstage playing a funeral march.
Anyone that ever wanted to smile
Had someone backstage singing the wisdom of seriousness.
Every slave that wanted to be free
Had a bemaster backstage sleeping on mental laurels and incense.
Yet, the slave always learned by necessity
To put the bemasters to sleep forever in their bed of laurels and incense.
The wings of the museum are loaded with bemasters
Walking around like ghosts
Screaming through the windows from inside
The miserable wisdom returned to lullaby
Their sleeping pill for evermore:
“Rock-a-bye, baby, thy cradle is green;
Father's a nobleman, mother's a queen;
And Betty's a lady, and wears a gold ring;
And Johnny's a drummer, and drums for the king.”

Brilliant just to remind you that it is your return to suggest a topic for the next round :)

OK I think I will relaunch this one
Subject for this round is:

etiquette

Good luck:seeya:

Etiquette's a courtesy
One undertakes when one can't flee.

Etiquette
etches
Quixote's eddied
Ruefulness abreast
Lions


(note: Don Quixote in its latest English translation, is divided into two parts: Knight of the Rueful Figure and Knight of the Lion. This poem is already gibberish. Not knowing where it is derived from would make it even more 'gibberishy')

Capture/Sedate/Kill
Cool/Carve/Cook
Season/Bless/Serve

Cannibal Etiquette Well Preserved

Please. Thank you. After you, Sir.
Manners cost nothing, use them frequently

tweet
twitter twitter
everyone's a critic
social media, speeding train
manners

OK Etiquette's Entries are up. All worthy of a win but only I must chose and so the winnigs goes to:

Melanie I liked the piece because it started with
tweet and ended with manners. It put a real spin to it for me anyway :p

Congratulations Melanie:hurray:

YaY! Thank you cacian. Not bad for someone who has never tweeted ^_^

Okay, next subject is WINDOW and deadline is April 15th

Washing windows in the walls,
Weeping as the squeegee falls.

Congratulations Melanie!

I was late to the party with this offering:

Etiquette

Etiquette
is a cut
above; an
elegance
of virtue
amongst
social
mores;
where one
seeks to
commune
with angels

3/20/2013 r.3/21/2013

... and here's my new entry:

Windows

Windows are a pane
(or two, or more)
A panoply of glass
against the rain
A port in the storm
sailing first class

3/21/2013

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

My Eyes look into the window of Promise

From my two-balled pen
of quartz filled sand
The peddlar of Utopia
supplants my ink of faith
with a sketch of hope


---

I'm really tired right now, I've been up all night suffering the consequences of insomnia. I might revise this before the deadline.

Open to the soul
My windows invite peepers
Do I care what they envision?
Not any more...

Pendragon

The piece on etiquette is really fun tailor STATELY. :)


open
window
and see oh
how the wind blows
the fewer
the throws
the pleasure
the sows
there comes the slown
to close up the flown
and the wind is downed
to a window's lowened

Prisoner's request

The prisoner said to the warder tall
I need a window on my wall
to look at the world so cruel and mean
that makes my crimes look so pristine.

Window Watcher

Fractured realities ,
watching worlds pass by
a voiceless face,
unseen but all seeing,
disembodied presence.

Strangers
who remain nameless
become intimate acquaintances,
but always out of reach.

Truth and lie
lose definition,
there are only segments
of what their lives may be.

Quick reminder...the deadline for the Minimalist Poetry Contest is tomorrow. "Window" is the subject. Since it's minimalist then you might have time to pull one together. There are 7 exceptional entries so far, all worthy of a win!

The Minimalist Poetry Contest for the subject of "Window" is now closed.

Adolescent09...Your refreshing surprises of unexpected gems continue to delight...."peddler of Utopia" "supplanting your pen's "ink of faith" with "a sketch of hope" is very clever. Your title adds to your poem very effectively and pulls it all together.

YesNo...very good usage of imagery and creative interpretation of the "Window" subject.

tailor STATELY..."panoply of glass...against the rain" made me feel like I could hear the sound of rain against a dazzling array of window panes...nice visual. The rhyming was just enough to add a nice touch.

Pendragon...I love the metaphor of the windows actually being openings to your soul. Your question draws the reader in. Intriguing.

cacian...I liked the structure you had in this poem where you tucked 4 short lines into the middle all starting with "the" and having a syllable count of 3-2-3-2 almost like the window is open, then 4 lines, then the window is closed...fun to read

phoenixtears...very successful iambic pentameter and very poignant regarding injustice. You said so much in just 4 lines of poetry.

Dark Muse...I love your perspective of connecting with the disconnected strangers from a distance, through the window. Your insights into this experience are masterfully executed and would be very moving if read aloud in group.

As you can see, I liked them all and was so impressed by everyone's talent!!!

My Congratulations goes to Adolescent09 !!!

My Eyes look into the window of Promise
From my two-balled pen
of quartz filled sand
The peddlar of Utopia
supplants my ink of faith
with a sketch of hope
~ Adolescent09