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between the Atlantic
and the Pacific
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between Blue Ridge Mountains
and the Rockies
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between thick groves
and desert dunes
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between Interstate 540
and County 83
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between a curvy driveway
and an odd shaped pond
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between open french doors
and a puckered headboard
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between your arms
and your voice
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between a gasp
and a long sigh
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there lies the heartland
where I long to be
I like this poem very much, Haunted. It really built up to those final two lines nicely. The way you kept it to two lines each and put the plus signs between is quite clever.
aw thank you Janine :)
Thanks everyone for your entries - a wealth of imagery to work my way through.
The deadline has passed so no more entries - and I shall have my decision asap.
H
Wow, what a job. I would be in danger of repeating myself if I commented in too much detail on the merits of each of the 8 entries since they all met the challenge so well. Each succeeded in evoking a certain place extremely effectively.
Some were intensely colourful and sensual – reading them was like embarking on a journey to a different world.
Others were more internalised – focusing on the emotional impact of a place rather than on its fundamental qualities.
But having re-read these several times, I have finally picked the best of what was a fine bunch :
AdoreroDio – much as I loved this little gem I think it was intended as a belated entry for the previous month’s comp, so better luck next month.
krymsonkyng – the West meets the Third World head-on. I love the image of ‘foreigners soaked in Tej’ and that enigmatic closing expression. This blend of imagery and reflection worked really well and as soon as I read it I felt this certainly had the makings of a worthy winner…..
autolycus – impressions of a war-ravaged landscape – I appreciated the use of subtle brush-strokes requiring the reader to take a step or two back from the canvas to discover the entire picture
DarkMuse – I would guess a bull-ring from the title, but it could be any ancient patch of desert – simple but effective
Pendragon – your trademark human touch – a secret place of simple beauty perfectly drawn
breathtest – a truly minimal poem – the internal landscape of the existentialist thinker perhaps
DieterM – very rich, exotic imagery – exactly what I had hoped to find when setting this particular topic. This was another very strong contender for the prize,
BUT the winner has to be
Haunted – not only because of the clever conceit of zooming in on that special place using Google Earth’s amazing technology, but also for the skill in which you sweep the reader with you into that intimate, microcosmic landscape of human emotion. Every couplet is a gem of understatement; in a word, this was ‘masterful’.
Congratulations Haunted – and thanks everyone else for making it such a pleasure to read your words.
H
Congratulations Haunted :iagree:
Haha, actually it was meant for this one but that's okay I can see how the mistake could be made. I wrote about the place where I live where at certain times you can see the aurora borealis along the shore of Lake Superior :}
Congrats Haunted! :] a well deserved win.
In that case, apologies Ado - your lovely piece seemed to fit so well with Dark Muse's picture. Excse me now while I go and kick myself.....
H
Haha mine was acutally about the Roman Coliseum
Way to go Haunted... Mwah.
xo
Oops, I missed this one. Too busy I'm afraid. Congrats Haunted. :)
Haunted, I told you I was impressed with this poem. You did a spendid job and well deserve the honors!
congrats, haunted. when I read your piece, I immediately knew I didn't run a chance of winning because yours was the best (I thouroughly enjoyed all the others, mind you, mine included ;)) but, hey, I recognize a master-piece when I see one). should I be jealous? I should. Am I? Nope, never, don't even know what jealousy means... lol
Hill, thanks so much!!!! I didn't think I stood a chance! Thanks to everyone for your kind words. Dieter, you kidding right? My jaw dropped when I read yours!
I was thinking of a theme for the next round and I kept coming back to this one: anniversary.
I don't want to extend it to more than 4 weeks so let's have all the entries in by Friday November 12 at 11:59pm. Happy anniversary! ;)
Cuts in the doorframe,
candles in cake,
they say the flame that burns brightest is soon snuffed
but the mounting light of each year
best marks the growth of our romance
and amazes more than fireworks.