You neglected an important "rule" of haiku--that is it must involve or reflect nature to be pure haiku. Therefore, what you wrote is not haiku.Quote:
Originally Posted by ;7807
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You neglected an important "rule" of haiku--that is it must involve or reflect nature to be pure haiku. Therefore, what you wrote is not haiku.Quote:
Originally Posted by ;7807
Avoiding action
Can be seen as simply a
Safe way to live life.
safe way to live life
avoiding the yellow signs
all is avoidence
All is avoidance
Never ceasing metronome
Pacing to and fro
Pacing to and fro,
mind in grey consternation,
called by slim colors.
Called by slim colors
I am, to a life of new
beauty for my love.
Beauty for my love
Sold by the ounce in sachets
Marketing folly
Marketing folly
Love in a bottle- what made
You think they'd want this?
Hi Drama and MissC!
You think they'd want this?
To be left all alone again
We'll see how it ends
You think theyd want this?
Peace pipes tossed for pack o' smokes
Reminiscent tears
hi janine! oh, look we did it simultaneously! to the same minute even, how cool :) But both our last lines seem to go well together, let the next person put one in between :D
Reminiscent tears
Why must it come down to this?
We'll see how it ends
Consider it fixed! Hi Drame! :wave: Hi Janine!
Hey Miss C! great job stringing our lines together
We'll see how it ends
Zealous eyes vacuum each word
Climatic goodbyes
Climactic goodbyes
A passionate kiss farewell
This is real life, yes?
Thanks Drame, how goes it?
This is real life, yes?
Illusion strikes hard
Alienation
:alien:
It goes bittersweet as always....., yourself?
Alienation:alien:
Remembering you drove me off--
And you want me now?
Sounds sbout right, and that's why I'm the sweetener! Wish I could talk more, but it's time to turn in... Loved that last, by the way...
And you want me now.
Now that I've married another?
Sorry time has past.
:D Hi Drama and MsC - back again! Hiya Virgil... How is everyone tonight. Taking a short break now to check on things on here. Gang - if you review this page there sure is a lot of broken hearts on here :bawling:
Sorry time has past.
No sense in calling me back now;
I, who have moved on.
Sorry, time has passed.
Cinderella, you must go.
The wickeds are nigh.
didn't want to ruin the flow.....
Beat you out Lain - sorry - how are you tonight?
I, who have moved on
To a world unto myself
Love the space I'm in
The wickeds are nigh
And snow white has now dozed off.
Will Prince Charming come?
Hi everyone. I'm fine Janine. How are you?
Thanks Virg - I was first. I will take your Prince Charming line anyway.......
Will Prince Charming come?
Illustionist - Prince is dead
Doubtful existence
:lol: Oh, you women can get so cynical. But I bet it's probaby becuase of us men. ;)Quote:
Originally Posted by Janine
Doubtful existence
But we still dream the night prior.
Santa may still come.
It is! (pack of wolves:lol: )Quote:
Originally Posted by Virgil
Will Prince Charming come?
Kiss upon Snow White's cold lips
She awaits in glass
She waits in glass
Frozen for eternity
Or until she melts.
Cynical and critical, too It's awaits not waits...sillyQuote:
Originally Posted by Virgil
Or until she melts
The witch in Oz still rages on
Then the spell is cast
then the spell is cast.
beauty falls from the heavens,
enchanting this earth
Enchanting this earth
With a wand of space metal
She spreads her magic.
She spreads her magic
Beautiful butterfly flirts
With every fresh bloom
I'm doing fine, Janine, although I should've went to University of the Philippines today to file an application for the College Entrance Exams. But my dad's car is against the number-coding.
She spreads her magic.
Bwahahahaha, she screams!
Now spreads the Mayo.
:p
Ay! Okay. Someone fix it? :(
With every fresh bloom
She goes out and milks the cows
Now spreads the mayo
i hope i fixed it well!
Now spreads the mayo
on the roast beef and white bread.
Mmm, I'm hungry now.
Mmm, I'm hungry now
For chocolate and ice-cream
Think I will get some
Think I will get some
big chocolate chip cookies.
Oh, darn. No more milk.
Good night out there. :)
Oh, darn. No more milk.
Probably should buy some now
...Maybe tomorrow
Maybe tommorow
Will the sunrise discover
Music on my lips
Music on my lips
As angel voices join in
A throng of spirit
a throng of spirit
the hallelujah chorus
rings, filling senses