hi there Il Penseroso! welcome:D
Before the night falls
Creatures sense their soon demise
Flee into branches
gah...i am terrible at haikus today:(
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hi there Il Penseroso! welcome:D
Before the night falls
Creatures sense their soon demise
Flee into branches
gah...i am terrible at haikus today:(
I DID IT AGAIN!!!! gah!! sorry Il Penseroso!!!!
everyone ignore my last post
No, i won't ignore it. it is not very bad.. :lol: Look at me, I'm always terrible at haikus..Quote:
Originally Posted by dramasnot6
Watch me:
Flee into branches
My tears melted with the leaves
Waiting for The End
Ahh, I got skipped. Oh well, easily fixed.
Waiting for the end
of day's deflated exit,
mind the calming dusk.
Mind the calming dusk
forces me to love her eyes
and all her style.
And all her style
is working into my blood.
She shakes her hips smooth.
She shakes her hips smooth,
Moving to sensuous beat
Salsa is our love
Ah..
Salsa is our love
Curious beating of the hearts
Swaying in spotlight.
Sorry. No good.
Swaying in spotlight
Lighted blessings flicker fast
Intoxicated
Intoxicated
I stumble across the floor.
Honey, please hold me.
Honey, please hold me,
The cold rends the heat from me
Love, I need you so.
Love, I need you so
you clack me like hot trainwheels
we're rushing our doom
We're rushing our doom
By having frequent birthdays.
Please make them stop now.
Please make them stop now,
and by artist's grand style
make the world of ice.
Make the world of ice
Shave the icecubes swallowing
The warmth of my mouth
The warmth of my mouth
is by your breath fanned, embers
heated by reply.
Silence screams within me
Your ears deafened by the sound
Our book closes forever.
Virgil - can't stop those birthdays!!!:D
Not bad Janine, but I think you got six syllables in that last line. I'll modify it.
Book closes forever,
life ends with a small whimper.
Sun goes by again.
D'oh, I got skipped again.
Sun goes by again
and glowing souls glister more,
heated by reply.
heated by reply
pressure to hit submit, poor
Il Penseroso
Wow, that is an excellent one. :thumbs_upQuote:
Originally Posted by Il Penseroso
Il penseroso,
let's meet in Florence by the
ponte vecchio.
http://www.longpassages.org/images/F...ial%20view.jpg
Ponte veccio,
the old bridge in Italy,
would be like a dream.
would be like a dream,
like walking on arias
drinking Chianti
Drinking Chianti
with Italian bread and cheese,
Wild mushrooms in oil.
wild mushrooms in oil
partying like crazy with
sweet red potatoes
Not a good effort anyway. I was rushed.
:lol:Quote:
Originally Posted by Riesa
Sweet red potatoes
Boiled with corned beef and cabbage
with spicy mustard.
;)
with spicy mustard
eggroll hors'doevers sing a hot
tempting melody
Hmmm, I'm going to get some food.
Tempting melody
played upon an ancient lute
wittles the hours.
Chinese or Italian?
wittles the hours
to diminutive specks like
sunbeam captured dust
Neither. Boxed mac-n-cheese, with hot sauce.
Sunbeam captured dust
sinks and rises by currents
touched only by air.
ick. :lol: I had a gardenburger with jalapenos.
touched only by air
the boy in his bubble
reflects in silence
I'm in college, so I make do with lots of cheap grosseries.
Reflects in silence
the rugged star of westerns,
all hands with a gun.
My favorite college food was top ramen with tuna and an egg, saturated with Rooster chili-garlic sauce. I've had my share of gross groceries.
all hands with a gun
the wicked wind's a blowin
meet sundown at Ike's.
That doesn't sound so gross.
Meet sundown at Ike's
the dropping day fills each bowl
with mystery chow.
That was really really good, congrats!! Im becoming a big fan of your haikusQuote:
Originally Posted by Il Penseroso
With mystery chow
Cerebral cows graze roughly
Teeth ache from thinking
Gee, quite a modification....Quote:
Originally Posted by Virgil
Glad I am not as overly sensitive about my lame attempt to write, as I am about my artwork.
I'd call that a total rewrite!
Virgil, how many syllables should it have? I can rewrite it. I don't really know the technical rules of H. It was really from a longer poem I wrote - modified it quickly for this post.
my new lame attempt:
Silence screams within me
Your ears deafened by the sound
Pages close forever.
beyond then and here
now gone to distance near
far beyond imaginings