Unless you pronounce it as "stru-ggeh-ling". Haha.
Am I supposed to continue my own Haiku?
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Unless you pronounce it as "stru-ggeh-ling". Haha.
Am I supposed to continue my own Haiku?
Allow me:
Flailing from a thread
Spider, poised between two hands
Subject to his will
Subject to his will
The spider sprouts silver wings
Now, its time to fly
Hey, rob, guess what, I already finished the Airbourne Honour!:)
Now, it's time to fly
Alarm's gone off, there's trouble!
The Warriors take flight
Thanks -- what'd you think?
The Warriors take flight
to the Zu mountains to fight
with their katanas
Two words, man-
Really Good.:)
Normally, the title alone has the power to make me allergic to the story, seeing that it is about planes and wars. But yours, man, it was different.. You've got a special power indeed. A writer by day and a vigilant superhero at night?
With their katanas
Blades glimmer in the crimson sun
They charge with vigour
They charge with vigor -
Running towards their lives so fast,
Then trip, crawl towards graves.
Um, is the word "towards" just composed of 1 syllable, like "tords"? Because if it's not, I'm afraid the last line has 6 syllables.
Hi ShoutGrace!
Well, hello Laindessiel. How do you say 'towards'? One thing you did forget to mention - if 'towards' is more than one syllable, then my second line is invalid as well, and deserving similar criticism. ;)
Like "TOH-wards".
Well, what should we do about it? Maybe we should take a poll! Have people vote as to whether or not my haiku is valid - see if there is anybody out there who would be willing to try to use it, assuming that it can be pronounced with just one syllable?
Haha! I'll just ask Mr. Webster about it. Don't worry. Wait a sec. :)
Well, after that's done, then I think we might need to have a little talk.
Right. Mr. Webster pronounces it as "TOH-wards".
So I guess you'll just have to make another one!
(Without the word "towards? Hihihihihi....) ;)
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Originally Posted by Merriam Webster's Online Dictionary
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Originally Posted by Dictionary.com
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Originally Posted by American Heritage Dictionary
1.) Do you have speakers so you can listen to both?
2.) Even given the fact that 'towards' is necessarily pronounced with two syllables, which it clearly is not, it isn't considered very polite to point these things out - I've finished several haikus that had syllabic discrepancies.
I do thank you for your concern.
I'm going to repost my haiku here:
They charge with vigor -
Running towards their lives so fast,
Then trip, crawl towards graves.
oooo nice haiku, creative take on mine:D
Then trip, crawl towards graves.
Those foxholes, forever deep
Muskets like shovels
Oh, okay. Please don't get mad. I know you are a Haiku Great, I've read your entries and Toni likes you a lot.
I "corrected" your entry because I "thought" that it was wrong and so we can't continue doing it if it remains that way. I "just thought" that it was wrong, alright? Please don't get mad.
I've listened to the word and it was pronounced like "TOH-wards" when I first heard it but "tords" when I thought about the word contains just 1 syllable. And I live in Asia so there are pronunciation differences in this part of the world as compared in the West. But now I realized that IT is "TAWRDS".
Right. I hope everything is settled and I hope you are not mad at me. The correcting thing is second nature to me because I'm the eldest in the family and my siblings are recipients of it.
Haiku entry:
Then trip, crawl towards graves.
Begging for a man's pity
For her little err.
For her little err,
Soldiers seek to bury her
Muskets like shovels.
I enjoy these little mix-ups. Makes for an interesting challenge.
Muskets like shovels
Placed on my red table
Look not really good.
Looks not really good
When Rainbowed lies and Romance
Recline side by side
Hello, dear Pensy!:lol:
Recline side by side
stupored by sun and the pure
haze of laziness
Haze of laziness
Does not let me work at all
I am feeling dead.
Hi Toni! :)
I am feeling dead
Void of frenzied lights dripping
Musical color
Musical color
Paralyzes crumpled fears
Midnight sun is up
why did u ignore my haiku?Quote:
Originally Posted by Laindessiel
thanks again for saving the last line robinhood, defender of the poor and haiku victims?:D
Musical color
Flutes weave with players sweet breath
Talentless spider
oh im so sorry toni, didnt know u posted one for musical color already....
Midnight sun is up
Movements clandestine and trapped
Hail to demons will
It is oki, dramasnot:lol: :lol: ;) :p :D :) (I love emoticons)Quote:
Originally Posted by dramasnot6
Hail to demons will
The sky will tumble at Fall
Stings of human sin..
Stings of human sin
Vodka embeds every sound
Blonde hair pokes through sheets
Frankly I think the author has descretion on how he wants to pronounce it. I like the flexibility.Quote:
Originally Posted by ShoutGrace
Blonde hair pokes through sheets
After a night of rolling fun.
My first and only love.
aww that last line was touching virgil
My first and only love
She melts into my fingers
Luscious chocolate
No Dramasnot, I didn't. You probably posted already while I was still typing. I don't ignore anyone, it makes them feel bad. And when someone feels bad, I blame myself. :(Quote:
Originally Posted by dramasnot6
ah i understand.its ok, dont blame yourself. blame technology:p
Thanks!Quote:
Originally Posted by dramasnot6
Luscious chocolate
made my hips explode wide
and my belly hang
lol
And my belly hang
Endless rolls fight gravity
Pillsbury Doughboy
Pillsbury Doughboy
Is what the guys call me now.
Poke a finger in.
Poke a finger in,
explore sensuality
but linger no more.
But linger no more
Flee to the woods if you wish
Before the night falls
Welcome to the forum, Il Penseroso!:wave:
Hope you have a great time! :lol:
Thanks toni! I'm sure I will.
Before the night falls,
shadows caress your lids,
mind the calming dusk.