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ghastly tunes I hear,
the beat jars my seatbelt loose,
highschool traffic jams

highschool traffic jam
stoplights blinking on and off
move you stupid cars!!!

Move you stupid cars
To Hell I am now headed so..
pave way now or die..

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Okay, that was horrible..

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Originally Posted by Laindessiel

Thanks, Virg! I am not a poet, actually, I'll leave that to Toni... But I'll try it once in a while...

Bushy tails wave back
Behind mahogany trees.
They whisper goodbye.

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You're welcome. Wow, just noticed, you've got about a hundred posts in less than a week. I guess you like lit net. :)

Pave wave now or die
But first put your toys away.
Girl is dramatic.
:D

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Originally Posted by Virgil

You're welcome. Wow, just noticed, you've got about a hundred posts in less than a week. I guess you like lit net. :)

Pave wave now or die
But first put your toys away.
Girl is dramatic.
:D

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I sure love it here! :lol: :lol: :lol:

Everytime I get the chance, I would become the worst mouse potato in the entirety of the universe, enduring my mom's complaints and a-scoldings every night when I sleep at no earlier than 2am (she's getting concerned about my pimples...).

Girl is dramatic
Thinking of abyss and void.
But eats chocolates.

But eats chocolates.
She succumbs to each sinful
Aphrodisiac.

Aphrodisiac
Venerable, it won't be
But for males, maybe

But for males, maybe
Females would rule this planet.
Give the girls a chance.

Give the girls a chance.
Shut your freaking babblers up.
And don't scorn like that.

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Originally Posted by Laindessiel

Give the girls a chance.
Shut your freaking babblers up.
And don't scorn like that.

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:lol: :lol: Isn't language amazing? You changed the whole tone of where I was by starting the second sentence with "Shut...".

And don't scorn like that
Or your face will freeze solid.
Now go clean your room.

Now go clean your room
And don't attempt to argue,
My rage is boundless.

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Originally Posted by ShoutGrace

Now go clean your room
And don't attempt to argue,
My rage is boundless.

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My rage is boundless
Crouched like a wild animal
Numb beyond belief.

Numb beyond belief
They hear the warmth of winter
Lost in tranquil thoughts

Lost in tranquil thoughts
I suddenly heard him sing
the sky turned to ash

The sky turned to ash,
Demons rose from smoking ground
Hell, Earth indistinct.

Hell, Earth indistinct
Dance with the devils and filth
Chained screams, I set free

Chained screams, I set free
corrosion for once,a friend
my broken gait is my delirious dance

Mr. Eep, you last line is composed of 10 syllables! It's a Haiku, Doctor...I can't follow that... ;) ;)

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Originally Posted by toni

Hell, Earth indistinct
Dance with the devils and filth
Chained screams, I set free

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Chained screams, I set free
restricted personages
In the vein of love.

Laindessiel wrote;
Mr. Eep, you last line is composed of 10 syllables! It's a Haiku, Doctor...I can't follow that...

Oops - OH Gawd - I stuffed up!!:crash: :D

After doing some hasty reminding of the use of syllables, is this better?

In the vein of love
move swift and free
take my soul there

Geez - I hope so:sick:

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Originally Posted by Den

Haiku:
1. A Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons.

2. A poem written in this form.

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:D :D


Take my soul there
Into a realm of quiet and
unremitted peace.

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Originally Posted by Dr Eep

Laindessiel wrote;
Mr. Eep, you last line is composed of 10 syllables! It's a Haiku, Doctor...I can't follow that...

Oops - OH Gawd - I stuffed up!!:crash: :D

After doing some hasty reminding of the use of syllables, is this better?

In the vein of love
move swift and free
take my soul there

Geez - I hope so:sick:

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You still must get your self sick, Doc...the last line is now composed of lesser than 10 but lesser than 5!!! Now how's that? Can I prescribe you something? :blush: :D :idea:

I want to get you all better! You are such a very moving poet!! I read your poems in your thread and it moved me heaven and earth!:thumbs_up :thumbs_up :thumbs_up

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Originally Posted by ShoutGrace

:D :D


Take my soul there
Into a realm of quiet and
unremitted peace.

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Shoutgrace, same goes for you, dear....
:blush:

Unremmitted peace
No break from constant warfare
Into the bunker

Into the bunker
Crime and love still lay asleep.
Wish they would not wake.

Wish they would not wake
But somehow they always do
Lets kill Prince Charming

Let's kill Prince Charmong
Not yet, said Charming Princess
"I will kiss him first"

I will kiss him first,
before I recede into
mist and nothingness

mist and nothingness
its what i feel inside me
im a slowly dying leaf

In slowly dying leaf
I sing lullabies to thee...
So long and goodnight...

This Haiku man....:flare: :lol:

How many syllables in the word 'Hari Kiri' - cos that's what I'm going to commit if I can't get this right.
4 right??? PLease tell me I'm right????
AS for the game;

Ahem...
So long and goodnight
my ego is blasted bare
come hari kiri:blush: :blush: :p

Hi Dr Eep!!! You are right, .. Don't worry...
Anyway...

Come hari kiri,
thy sins have aged in teardrops
hand me the dagger...

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was that good?

It was good for me.



Hand me the dagger
Remember how I told you
She would pay some day?

She would pay some day,
She had always promised to
Loan still unpaid

Loan IS still unpaid (Kilt, you only composed a line of 4 syllables)
Trudges on her dampened heart
And moist conscience too

And moist conscience too
Cannot deter us from this
Path of wanton hate.

Path of wanton hate
Heedlessly begs for a snap.
Flailing from the thread

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Originally Posted by Laindessiel

Loan IS still unpaid (Kilt, you only composed a line of 4 syllables)

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Nonsense, I just stressed both Lo & an :p

Palusot!!!

Flailing from the thread,
A tenuous grasp of my
Fading sanity.