Famous Quoted Line Poetry Contest

Thanks for the entries. I guess it's time to continue the game. I've read them several times and liked them all well enough. I'll even make a few comments for a change, not that I'm much for critique.

Pen, a fine job in summing up many aspects of life with single lines like that. An enjoyable poem in structure and full of meaningful words.

Muse, a solid work about responsibility for oneself, and the need to take hold of each day, to try and make the most, even if dark. Has the sound of truth.

Zoolane, I liked the dignity of yours. Despite being wronged, one was strong enough to forgive, yet self-respecting to not allow the wrong to be repeated.

Hard choice as it usually is, but I'm going to hand this one to zoolane. Well done.

Good going zoolane! :):):)

Thank you Jajdude. Hmm let me think of one? be back soon.

Famous quote is from a poem called 'My Little One' by Tennesse Williams.

I hold him not. Indeed, who could?


Good luck everyone who taken part the date line June 30th.

The Gravity of His Love

I stand in stillness,
sentient,
before the gray of the grave,
bitter the wind
upon my skin.

How could I not
remember?
Last words spoken
unknown than
the full weight
they would carry.

I hold him not.
Indeed, who could?
when somewhere
on the other side
of the world
he died.

Just as he
once lived,
alone,
while his last breath
escaped
into the desert sun
and his eyes
began to fade.

All that remains
to me
are ashes, bones
and memories,
but did I ever
know the full
gravity of his love?

Why is it now
that the distance
between us has
never been so
small?

Because now
that he is gone
he is ever more
present than
when once I knew
he lived
while yet he
kept apart.

Gone

I hold him not, indeed, who could?
The world outside is looking good
And he is off upon some whim,
Forgetting me forgiving him.

Four days left to enter.

For Jonathan

He was a hard-head man out on his own
Married now with a home of his own
He's still my son, it's so hard to let go
But children grow up, it's inevitibe you know
And I hold him not, who could
Life with a wife is one thing that's good
But I miss him so he seems so far away
But one "Dad, I love you" always makes it OK
I gained a daughter, I did not loose a son
Family is all that matters when all is said and done

Pendragon

All three poems great wonderful.

Dark Muse- I adore your poem because first stanza is old fashion style what mean is a sense of Victoria era, I imagine a person stand at graveside saying this poem as words hit cold air. The tone change I think in the throed stanza to soldier who dies for country but also bring back current conflict against terror so the western world said. The end of the piece show that person who lost him is moving on but he still has a impact on them.

Yes- It great little poem remind me of being child and found bird that injury. Wanting the bird to be freedom but also could be refer to person who illness and died. The person reach out for forgiveness for a act of kind show to person who was ill.

Pen- I absolute love this poem because it show parent love for their child which I can relate because aviate with three daughters that time will come. I think it spot on to point how parent would feel.


Winner is............... Dark Muse only because I felt feel the atmosphere when reading it.

But in my book you all are winners.

Thank you very much, I will start working on thinking up the next line.

Here is a quote from one of my personal favorites, Sylvia Plath. Quote taken from Lady Lazarus

Dying
Is an art, like everything else.
I do it exceptionally well.

Well Done, Muse. I forgot to enter this one.

Well since no one seems to want to tackle this I will provide an alterntive line. For those who may still want to use the original you are welcome to, so you have a choice. But still only one poem per person so you don't get extra credidt for writing a poem for both.

So in honor of Moon Day here is you altenrate line

With the silver seas around us and the pale moon overhead

From "A Ballad of John Silver" by John Masefield


Deadline August 10

The Silver Sea

They have got us with their pranking,
Caused more damage than they ought.
We can see them move the planking
To have fun with those they've caught.

With our hands bound we are waiting
Till as one by one we fall,
Water-logged, our lungs inflating:
Does it take much time at all?

With the silver seas around us
And the pale moon overhead,
There's now nothing to astound us.
We're beneath those seas and dead.

Visions

With the silver seas around us and the pale moon overhead
We struggled hard against the waves, but our hearts had turned to dread
It was strange to see a boiling sea on so clear a night
And sailors wailed about seeing ghosts, the St Elmo's fire alight
It was then she rose like a spouting whale from the troubled sea
A fairy child with glistening skin and eyes terrible to see
The moon reached down with glowing arms and raised her like a babe
And the sea grew calm and smooth as glass, without a single wave
And we knew we'd seen a sight mortals were never meant to see
And we crossed ourselves and said a prayer as we sailed on across the silver sea

Pendragon