Revenge (edited version)

You think you are free?
You think you are safe from me?
My blood still warm on your fingers,
no scent can diminish the stink of your sin.

I saw you as my sibling,
always by your side.
My wealth or my life,
what made you jealous?
Why you did so?

I lost my chance,
my only chance,
a life with my girl,
all wishes now gone.

My body is dead,
decaying and drying,
now a part of the earth.
I'm now a ghost,
you will suffer with misery,
your eyes blind with pain!

I'm coming,
your days will never be sunny,
no deity to save your soul,
you will taste my revenge.

It's much improved over the version I saw before: more control, more concern for the poetic flow.

@PrinceMyshkin : hey , thnx 4 the review :-) ...u guys r gud teachers, glad i found ths forum ...

"Those frauds!"
My strength was failing,
losses piling up.
My friends' true colours,
a smile of hatred on my lips.
Fate had made me a pauper !

I then turned to God,
blew the dust off the holy book,
alarmed my wife,
prayed till dawn.

The Lord too left me,
he answers only the rich,
a thought for the man in tears !

A channel on T.V
caught my eye,
spoke of revival from failure and frown,
a ray of hope filled my mind.

Amulets and chains I bought,
felt a comfort from deep inside,
happiness once more in my life,
my home became a paradise.

On a day like any other,
a news caught my eye,
my eye brows jumped with shock.
The divine crap makers, now handcuffed,
all set to be jailed !

I began to wonder,
saved I was, but how?
Those stones and strings ?
And then it clicked,
my belief the saviour,
what mattered was how I thought.

They were cheaters, I agree.
Grateful I am,
I'm not lame anymore.
I wish to see them,
a few words : "Thank you my dear frauds !"