Burning

No
Flame
In the
Night
l
My light doth taper
Like a waning glow
Thy pitch of gloom
Be a haunted vale
Thy foiled passion
A vanquished gypsy
Flickering torch of lustre
Oh that your wick would blaze!

I cannot help but read a phallic allusion in that last line (implicit even earlier) but oh, the cold heat of this! Good poem.

I love this poem for its economy and its lyrical language - and you draw a fair candle also.

Hill - I'm so glad you can see its a candle!

Prince - I did not think about the phallic allusions - but you're right. They must have appeared unconciously....

Clever clogs :P :D
JerryB

thank you

I'm not a fan of archaic language but I love it here, it looks so right in candlelight ;)

Oh Delta, you created a masterpiece. Mwah girlie.

Thanks Haunted and Maryd.

Enjoyed also. An economy of expression and a candle, albeit on the wane, to read by (probably why I had to squint to read the orange print).

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Thy foiled passion
A vanquished gypsy

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- Delightful !

Well done.

Thank you tailor. I'm mixed up on the thou, thy and thee but I didn't think too much here.

@delta40 : honestly, i'm still trying to understand this poem...but tht candle figure is such a cool idea..gud work !

Thank you Dark Prince. I think the meaning is open to interpretation.

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Originally Posted by Delta40

Prince - I did not think about the phallic allusions - but you're right. They must have appeared unconciously....

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Yes, those unconscious phalluses and their gender equivalents are the very devil, but at least they constitute safe sex!

I'm so envious..... :-)