Enough and To Spare

Enough and To Spare

There is a wind in my sails today
and yes,
I feel puffed up,
and anything falling against me
would bounce away laughing,
but always wanting more of that
joy.

With this wind I move smoothly
from port to port,
collecting my pay for odd jobs
here and there,
and I take it and hide it
in little flowered boxes all around,

and later, when I need the scuttle
opened, to breathe sun and blue,
when there is no wind
and I lie bobbing, no place to go,
I will stretch out my arms,

and find one such flowered box
come to surface, and I will pry
open the forgotten treasure
and taste its bounty.

amp, January Thirteenth, TwoThousandEight

Wonderful, Amp. Those "smooth sailing" days with the bright blue skies and the smiling wind are just the best. :)

Ampoule, this is a refreshing poem, I like it.:) There is freedom in it. I love the phrase 'to breathe sun and blue'. I am not sure I love the ending as much as the rest, but I still think this is a nice poem. :)

I must disagree with the dragon woman about the ending. I love that he box was a flowered one and that it returns at the end. But I heartily agree with Sweets' citation of the freedom in it. It feels like the least effortful of poems, almost a different genre from those where we struggle and fiddle and adjust...

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Originally Posted by PrinceMyshkin

I must disagree with the dragon woman about the ending. I love that he box was a flowered one and that it returns at the end. But I heartily agree with Sweets' citation of the freedom in it. It feels like the least effortful of poems, almost a different genre from those where we struggle and fiddle and adjust...

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Me, a dragon-woman?:D :p

I agree with what you say about the ending, I like the return of the box in the end, it is just that I didn't like the two last lines as much as the rest. I guess I was waiting for something more.

If there was a clap emote, I'd put it right <here>.

But for now, I suppose I'll do this :thumbs_up :clap :thumbs_up

Yes, I like the theme of freedom in this, but we have
nautical themes "wind in my sails" mixed with the land-lubbing flower boxes. Or did I misunderstand and that the boxes are floating atop the sea?
In any event I liked the rhythm and movement in these lines.

The flowered box image for me was much like a message in a bottle, that was how I viewed it, at any rate.

I liked the way the poem read, complete with the blue writing -- very reminiscent of sea and sails...

Enjoyed it, amp!

This is one of the most beautiful poems. Truly. Dazzling and transcendental.

I enjoyed it also particularly breathing the "sun and blue", how opposition bounced away laughing, and how the flowered boxes were always there.