Undefined Feelings

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10-09-2007, 09:16 AM
Gadget Girl

Undefined Feelings

Everyday of my life
I have the image of you
In my soul and in my mind
Can't forget the face of you

No one else knows about you
Only me and a trusted friend
People can't understand
They think of other things

I don't need someone's advice
I don't need a friend's comfort
The feeling inside is enough
To tell me of what I need to know

I can't get you out of my mind
I've always can't
But it gives me a sensation I've never known
A pleasure that is kept unknown

On the other hand, I can't tell
of what I am truly feeling
It is so unsure, so blurred, so forbidden
My undefined feelings for you
10-09-2007, 10:21 AM
dibyendra

Lovely expressions Gadget Girl ! Why don't you express this feelings to the one you love ? I bet he will love this one ! :thumbs_up
10-09-2007, 10:56 AM
Gadget Girl

Thanks, Dib! Actually, these sentiments are not mine; it's from my friend's. She's not saying anything to me about her feelings to a certain someone but I can sense it. So, I've decided to write her a poem. :)
10-09-2007, 11:21 AM
blazeofglory

Quote:

Originally Posted by Gadget Girl

Everyday of my life
I have the image of you
In my soul and in my mind
Can't forget the face of you

No one else knows about you
Only me and a trusted friend
People can't understand
They think of other things

I don't need someone's advice
I don't need a friend's comfort
The feeling inside is enough
To tell me of what I need to know

I can't get you out of my mind
I've always can't
But it gives me a sensation I've never known
A pleasure that is kept unknown

On the other hand, I can't tell
of what I am truly feeling
It is so unsure, so blurred, so forbidden
My undefined feelings for you

This is really a platonic type of love, something that has to do with immateriality. This is not lust, something unphysical, not sensual spiritual.
Here the lover is a too subtly built being .
10-09-2007, 11:42 AM
Gadget Girl

Thanks for the review, Blaze! Yes, it's kind of like that. So, in this type of poem, the lover is not sure of what she is 'truly' feeling. This line, "how can the right thing be so wrong" is somewhat relates to this. She is torn between what she wants and what the world wants. That made their love forbidden and so unsure.
10-09-2007, 01:05 PM
littlewing53

well spoken gg... all the more interesting once you hear the tale behind the words...lw
10-09-2007, 01:16 PM
dibyendra

Quote:

Originally Posted by Gadget Girl

Thanks, Dib! Actually, these sentiments are not mine; it's from my friend's. She's not saying anything to me about her feelings to a certain someone but I can sense it. So, I've decided to write her a poem. :)

Oh! anyway, I liked your feelings Gadget Girl ! Keep up your good work :thumbs_up !
10-09-2007, 02:19 PM
manny2

amazing, it kept me interested, i really liked it a lot! hope to see more of your work!
10-09-2007, 11:43 PM
Gadget Girl

Quote:

Originally Posted by littlewing53

well spoken gg... all the more interesting once you hear the tale behind the words...lw

Thanks a lot littlewing!

Quote:

Originally Posted by dibyendra

Oh! anyway, I liked your feelings Gadget Girl ! Keep up your good work :thumbs_up !

Hehe, thanks again Dib!

Quote:

Originally Posted by manny2

amazing, it kept me interested, i really liked it a lot! hope to see more of your work!

Thank you Manny! I'll try to post some more, but right now I'm not into my 'poetic' mood. :lol:
10-13-2007, 10:16 AM
blazeofglory

Quote:

Originally Posted by Gadget Girl

Thanks for the review, Blaze! Yes, it's kind of like that. So, in this type of poem, the lover is not sure of what she is 'truly' feeling. This line, "how can the right thing be so wrong" is somewhat relates to this. She is torn between what she wants and what the world wants. That made their love forbidden and so unsure.

That is how a story of love is scribbled and if there are no conflicting forces, there can be no love story. When a lover remains torn between two juxtaposed forces, the story becomes intensified.