how is act 1 scene 5 an effective piece of drama HELP:(

how is act 1 scene 5 an effective piece of drama, i have wrote my first draft and handed it in and now ive have got it back now a few months later and i have put some good points about the beginning of the scene (the servingmen to where capulet comes out and the party begins and capulet talks to his cousin) once i get to the part of the scene were romeo first see's juliet it becomes crap ill be honest it seirously goes crap after that till the end of my essay (the end of the scene)

i need some tips on what to put and how to show how differnt parts of the scene are effective pieces of drama E.g. were tybalt hears romeo and were him and juliet meet and kiss etc.

HELP HELP HELP HELP HELP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:flare: :( :crash:

put any thing what will help copy and paste me some examples by the way this is G.C.S.E not A level or nothing and this is in a british school but i think it will just be the same because every one must get questions like this about shakespear all over the world!