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I write
because I donīt have words,
I have pictures
and when
I can turn one into a sentence
a wisp inside my belly
makes a pirouette
and takes a bow.
( I asked in the general chat if wisp can be used instead of sprite or fairy. I like the word wisp better. Tell me if it seems strange. I do not want it to sound like strands of hair is floating around in my stomach! Not sure of the title. A good title is hard to find. )
i like it. sprite or fairy sounds a bit too animate . . . . wisp isn't quite the best word, but it works. nice poem!
I think that wisp works really well. A lovely simple little poem.
By the way, it's 'pirouette'.
i dance,Quote:
Originally Posted by Isagel
because i don't have lights,
i have darkness.
(just my reaction to the first reading of your first lines)
a delightful work, Isagel!
but the title sounds like those of essays, on study, on beauty, etc.
(btw, does writing excite your belly?)
Thank you, I blame the typo on gnomes.Quote:
Originally Posted by Grumbleguts
And thank you all for the nice comments. Iīll stick with wisp, then.
White camellia - thank you for the small poem. Nah, it doesnīt excite my belly. It makes me joyous.
It's very nice. Almost like a haiku in its simplicity.
I like the wisp very much - I did wonder when it might appear after your plea for help yesterday. It fits a lot better than gnome would have done. :D
Now I am very pleased! Thank you for the help on the wisp question.
Gnome in the belly ... that sounds bad. Like "Alien".
i like it. very simple and yet very meaningful. but, you're right, finding a good title is hard. don't worry, it'll come to you soon enough