I have no family
a dad who dosnt care
2 sisters who hates you
a brother who killed him self
a over worked mother
and me so differnt from all of them
for at least for oneday
can we pretend to be a family.
.......just for once
Printable View
I have no family
a dad who dosnt care
2 sisters who hates you
a brother who killed him self
a over worked mother
and me so differnt from all of them
for at least for oneday
can we pretend to be a family.
.......just for once
Yeah I do like it, it is straight to the point. If this is a personal poem, from like..life experience I think you should go deeper, and use maybe some personification or symbols, I really do like it. I would just like to see more detail and perhaps your emotion toward it. Neat though!
Good poem. Its being, yourself. If ya understand. I have the opposite of that poem and still im sad, so dont feel left out.
ow. that's sad. painful. truthful. good. is it true? uhm,... if it is, i'm real sorry bout ur brother.