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The Cold Waiting Season

Dear Photographer:

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I asked: “where have you been my whole life, Jon Cartwright.”
As I watched a square dispersing a thousand rays of light to my eyes.
I fell freely inside your land
Through a window without a glass.

They weren’t windows; they were frames.
Frames that transported me to an enchanted city too far away
Every time I spelled your name
What a wonderful way to lose oneself.

As more as I contemplated them
I wondered what your thought were or what was in your head.
I felt like if I knew you for a long time
Even when I knew nothing of your mind.

Meet you in a park. Joint you one day in your walk.
It is too much to ask.
There should be nothing further than my land in your head.
We are two strangers with different mind,
Different eyes in unknown lands sharing images.

Now, many other names shine on the screen.
Admiration. They all are deservers of it.
The world has plenty of lands still to be seen,
Which have earned my esteem.

Still, you own the first sight that caught my mind.
The admiration of my eyes for your frames will not easily go away.
I’ll always open your page again.

I don’t know who you are or what you really see
But a favor I ask ye.
Don’t stop shooting. Don’t give up the posting in here.
Never stop to see.
For your work, at the other side of the world, as a thanked dweller, I’ll see.
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  1. 1n50mn14's Avatar
    I like it, but I'm a bit thrown off by how it rhymes in some places, but not in others.
  2. The Walker's Avatar
    Becca thanks for reading...
    yeah i gotta work on the rhymes, thanks for commenting!
  3. skib's Avatar
    I don't have the vaguest idea who Jon Cartwright is, but this poem took me on a wonderful journey!
  4. Stargazer86's Avatar
    Love this. Wonderful

    My only critique though, as Becca pointed out, was that sometimes you rhymed and sometimes you didn't. my personal opinion is that you shouldn't rhyme it at all. I think it would flow better like thoughts
  5. The Walker's Avatar
    i have never thought about that, stargazer, i like it to rhyme though but though i'll consider your opinion.