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On Watching the Snow

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andave_ya
, 02-02-2010 at 05:15 PM (1524 Views)
What does it mean to watch the snow
Slowly falling, slowly go
Across the window, throughout the day
Over the hills and far away?
What does it mean to watch a man
Forging ahead through peltering snow
On the through the valley, on through the way
Thinking of home all through the day?
What does it mean when home he has come
Home from his working, home to the sum;
Life is not wanting in measure or span
But isn’t complete without God the I AM.
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  1. JuniperWoolf's Avatar
    It sounds good when you read it aloud, I like it.

    But, you have one too many "the"s in line 7.
    Updated 02-02-2010 at 08:34 PM by JuniperWoolf
  2. Buh4Bee's Avatar
    very religious
  3. Virgil's Avatar
    The repetitions give this a nice rhythm. Very nice Andy. I will say i don't care for the unnatural word order in this line, "What does it mean when home he has come." Unnatural word order for the sake of rhyme really diminieshes the line.