the ocean always dreamed blue dreams

OOh your blog is so fresh and cool now hehe, I love all the water imagery.

And now to the poem, I thought it was beautiful, it had such a classcial/romanticism feeling to it.

Thank you, DM! Both compliments make me very happy. I have admired the way your blog looks for a long time; you inspired me, but it took a long time for me to figure it all out.

I enjoyed this poem quite a bit, especially these lines:

Yes, snow and light do exist together
The white world hinges on this wild surmise

I like the simple elegance of the bright imagery on the first line, and how the idea of coexistence is human conceit in the next blends the human world with the natural -- like light and snow. Lovely.

Thank you, Comedian.

There is something lovely and soft and quiet and wonderful about snow. I love the contrast you create in the poem between the tumultuous, unsettled nature of your thoughts against the soothing influence of the (settled?) snow. It is a nice poem, though I'm not sure about the use of 'prithee', it seems a little awkward and out of place.
In theme, and of course the instance of snow, it does remind me a little of Snow by Valdimir Holan, which of course you know. If there were no silence here the snow would have dreamed it up / You are alone / Spare the gestures, nothing for show. Still one of my favourites

You're a gal after me own heart for attempting to write a sonnet. We don't see enough contemporary poets using form. It's a misconception to believe that using prescribed forms stymies creativity in any way.

My only criticism is that even though you're using a time-honored form as the sonnet, you don't really need to use archaic terms such as "Prithee." Then again, its use might be intentionally
ironic on your part.

I loved how the "arctic" metaphors are sustained throughout the poem.

Your admirer and friend,
Auntie

Thank you, Fifth and Auntie. I am always appreciate your comments.

This poem is a work in progress. I initially posted it in the Personal Poetry section on sleepless night. I had the germ of an idea and I cranked something out. I had some extra unexpected time on Wednesday and I reworked it into the form you see here. I made the middle section much better, stronger, in my opinion, but I was less satisfied with the ending, which I felt was better in the original.

I put this here in my blog, but later changed ii again; I posted that incarnation along with the original one under the title "Snow falling and the light" in Personal Poetry. I like it better, but I'm still considering some things.

Yes, Fifth, after I wrote it I thought of that beautiful poem you shared with me last year. I still love it, too. I think that thematically they are quite different poems, and of course Holan's is the better. PrinceMyshkin thought he saw a similar theme as in Arnold's "Dover Beach," which was sweet. Kind of like comparing the sun to a little piece of hard candy lying on your table, but still.

Thanks for reading and commenting. I'm pleased you saw things that you liked. I changed the 'prithee' which no one liked. But now that line is no longer ten syllables. Oh well.