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A murder of crows

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It was crappy week. Work was OK, although there's never enough time to get everything done. But we've been extra busy and will be for a few months more, both at home and at school.

And the really difficult part, one of my youngest sons friends got in some serious trouble. The police came to our house and questioned my son. Life is just not the same when the police come to the door.

My heart is breaking for the young man who is in trouble, and for his mother. That has got to be a lonely place to be. We always think of men as tough and strong, but while boys becoming men might appear tough,they are fragile. From where I stand they don't seem to navigate the ups and downs of life as well. Statistics show that more girls than boys graduate from high school. I'm scared, too. I don't know how to keep my boy safe, from the world, from himself.

Anyway, the following was inspired by the vagaries of life, for those days when the world is too much with us.

A Murder of Crows

unsteadily I aim, as carefully as I can,
and although I have no heart for it,
shoot
a mantle of snow falls onto my shoulders,
and I catch glimpses of the lost city,
molting and molten,
a volcano of sin, purified,
through the flakes whirling madly around me
inky jets of nausea
sloshing in my gut,
I’m thrust into vertigo, as a sword into a stone;
huddling on the cracked cement,
my simple cup of hope, nearby, lies bleeding,
then
a hundred black-robed men surround me
I feel their boots through my thin skin,
celebrating my destruction
falling upward into the vortex, I wonder
shall I die?
shall I die?
and time, mortally wounded, falters

a woman, flat-lining,
emotions deserting what’s left of her face,
her ankles fat with sorrow, moans for her children,
but they are gone away,
their soles nibbled by a murder of crows
where are you mother?
where are you mother?
a scurvy tide of blackness
wheeling and keening above me,
reluctantly retreats
and I, at last, open my eyes, blinking, to the gray scrim of the world

Updated 11-08-2009 at 12:22 PM by qimissung

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  1. prendrelemick's Avatar
    You can't keep him safe from the world. All we parents can do is equip them to cope with it, and hope for the best.
  2. Maryd.'s Avatar
    As a parent I can empathise with you. And I feel the same as Prendrelemick, all we can do is guide our young and hope that one day it will all fall into place. Until then, hang in there.
  3. TheFifthElement's Avatar
    Yikes, sounds worrying Qimi. I know what you mean about boys - so much effort goes into protecting girls and yet boys seem so vulnerable. I worry about my son. Boys are more likely to suffer physical violence and seem more likely to get into trouble. It's a shame. All we can do is guide them and hope for the best. Be a friend to your son (I'm sure you are) and love him and perhaps that will give him all the protection he needs.

    Gorgeous poem, as always, though terribly sad and fraught. I hope it was carthartic writing it.
  4. qimissung's Avatar
    Thanky you, prendrelemick, Maryd, and Fifth. Yikes, indeed.

    Yeah, I know, theoretically, that I can't protect or save my son. The urge remains, however.

    Thanks for your kind words and thoughts. It helps, really.
  5. DanielBenoit's Avatar
    Powerful poem, especially with the precursor of the introduction. It's interesting to see how a poet's biographical events effect their work.

    My deepest sympathies truly. The latter stanza is particuarly powerful for me on a personal level, because it makes me think of my mother.

    I suppose the only thing you can do in the end is give him your love and care, and though sometimes disipline is necissary, don't discourage him.
    Updated 11-08-2009 at 12:36 PM by DanielBenoit
  6. rimbaud's Avatar
    Wow Qimi, it really is heartbreaking

    it a great poem, don't get me wrong, you know I'm a fan of your work
    It seems like you're going through some things
    now I see why you haven't posted one in a long time,

    I hope times will change
  7. Buh4Bee's Avatar
    Sorry you have to go through this. It's one day at a time.
  8. mtpspur's Avatar
    Ah I was quite familiar with the police visiting back in my guttersnipes' teen years. At one time when I was cooling my heels in court the judge passed me in the hall and greeted me almost as an old friend. I have treasured that recognition more then is seemly over the years. If it helps my children were always held accountable for their actions and consequences were many and aggravating as it seems that nothing seems to work. Then suddenly it's almost like a light comes on the things change. My boys eventually have turned in responsible adults but there was much weeping and gnashing of teeth. My prayers are with you. Children often know what they ought to do but have trouble with the accomplishing--so much pressure--so much to do. Be at peace.
  9. qimissung's Avatar
    Thank you Daniel, rimbaud, jesea and mtpspur. I will try to be at peace.
  10. PrinceMyshkin's Avatar
    "her ankles fat with sorrow"

    Wow! But all of this scratches at my heart's eyeballs with the power of the images.

    ("soles" was surely meant to be "souls," though)
  11. motherhubbard's Avatar
    it's heartbreaking. When they are little I wished for them to be a little bigger. Now that they are bigger I long for the time when I could just keep them in my arms and not have to worry about anything. I can't imagine the trials of having grown children. Now, I'm thinking it may be the hardest phase of parenthood.
  12. qimissung's Avatar
    Thank you Prince and motherhubbard. It IS hard. He's a good kid-so far. I believe him-for now. He's no trouble at home, but it's like being Sweet Pea's parent; remember him from Popeye?
  13. Virgil's Avatar
    I'm just seeing this now. Qimi, that is one heck of a poem. That is excellent. Wow! Perhaps your best one yet. Did you mean "soles" or "souls" in that last stanza? Both work and I do prefer soles, but that is a little different.

    Completely understand how hard the transition from boy to man is. Sometimes I wonder how I did it. I had friends who got in trouble (some very serious trouble) with the law growing up. Murder, robbery, drugs. You saw it all in Brooklyn. That's why I'm so vigilant on the glorification of drugs here on lit net. Not only are boys not graduating high school but they are way behind in college education as well. Contemporary life is disjointed from male impulses.
  14. qimissung's Avatar
    Thank you Virgil. I meant 'soles', but I knew most people would also think of 'souls.'

    "Contemporatry life is disjointed from male impulses." Well said! My son is a good person, I think, but his judgement is not always what it should be.