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When life was clean

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When I look at photographs of my childhood I am always struck by how young we all were, my parents and grandparents, my brother and sister and myself, and by how beautiful we all were. My parents in particular seem caught in a lovely light of youth and health. At the time they seemed so prosaic to me. I loved them-then and now-but they did not seem beautiful. In fact, I would venture to say that I, impossible as it seems, took them for granted. I have tried not to do that for years, but it doesn't matter. It is going to end one day, and I don't want it to. I don't want to ever have to live without them, my beautiful parents who made life safe for me and love me more than anyone ever has or probably ever will.

When life was clean

So it comes to this
two old people sit
in a forgotten house
their daughter, once
a biddable child, calls them
once a week, her voice
tinny over the phone line
as they breathe assurances
of their health and bridge
and the litany of friends who’ve
died
memories peer at them from the
corners of the room like mice
creeping out at night to nibble
at the photographs of black and white
when life was clean, it’s edges sharp
a firstborn son, now dead
a Christmas tree with
with sleepy headed children
gathered round it
a backyard barbecue
an orange Chevrolet
all the women in dresses with
snug bodices, swirling skirts
and upswept hair
the men with two cans of beer tucked
away and foolish grins tugging
at the corners of their mouths
and the giddiness of possibility
ringing in their ears
now they wait
patiently for sleep
for the days to pass
and the good father to come and
not even a dove can take away their
silent night

Qimissung
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  1. rimbaud's Avatar
    wow, so vivid
    images were crawling my mind as reading it
    great qimi!
  2. PrinceMyshkin's Avatar
    Oh my dear friend! I could swim in the warm, deep waters of your heart! I was especially struck (somehow) by

    an orange Chevrolet

    and

    the men with two cans of beer tucked
    away and foolish grins tugging
    at the corners of their mouths
    and the giddiness of possibility
    ringing in their ears

    Bless your singing heart!

    Jer
  3. Madhuri's Avatar
    Though, I have very little understanding of poetry, I could relate to this; I felt like I knew these emotions. It is very nice, Qim
  4. applepie's Avatar
    Very Nice! I have to agree with everyone else. This gave me such a vivid image, and it is very easy to relate to.
  5. Buh4Bee's Avatar
    I have to agree with Prince- love the orange Chevrolet.

    The poem leaves you with a same good feeling, even if death is lurking around the corner. I'm so glad to hear what marvelous parents you have. Enjoy your time with them as I am sure you always do.
  6. qimissung's Avatar
    Thank you rimbaud, Prince, Madhuri, Meg, and jersea. I'm really pleased that you liked it and found something to relate to in it. I guess it speaks well of our relationships with our families.

    Thank you jersea-I will!
  7. Virgil's Avatar
    I know the feeling quite well while looking at old photos. It's amazing that a moment in time can be captured. Ever wonder about life before photographs? It has certainly changed perspectives, and perhaps the emotions that spring up. The part that Prince quoted is excellent as well as the ending:

    now they wait
    patiently for sleep
    for the days to pass
    and the good father to come and
    not even a dove can take away their
    silent night
    Bitter sweet. Just like photographs.
  8. DanielBenoit's Avatar
    So vivid and full of nostaligic memories. There are so many little attributes which seem to hit your subconscious, and hit you rather personally, as if the poem was written by oneself.

    Like Prince there's something that I like about "an orange Chevrolet" as well as "snug bodices, swirling skirts/and upswept hair". There is something nostaligcally tragic about these lines, but I can't explain why.

    Also, I love the silence pertained in the one syllable line "dead", the sound is utterly reflective of the subject.

    My only problem with it is the title, it just doesn't seem to work for me.

    Wonderful.
  9. TheFifthElement's Avatar
    It is a lovely poem and a lovely blog Qimi. You should show it to your parents, I bet it would make them proud. As teenagers/young adults we all take our parents for granted, but it's okay 'cos they did the same with their parents too and they know it. I bet they know you love them.
  10. qimissung's Avatar
    Thank you, Fifth.
  11. paperleaves's Avatar
    I was going to quote my favorite lines of this, but then I realized i highlighted the WHOLE THING.

    jeez, qimi, you got some talentttttt!
  12. qimissung's Avatar
    Why, thank you, paperleaves.