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Foxtrot's Theories

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Heathcliff
, 10-20-2009 at 11:42 PM (974 Views)
Well. I finally have my blog working!

Yay.

I feel like a fish who has just escaped his tank to live in the ocean, 'Great... Now what?'

This is something I wrote in English at the start of the year:

Slinks into the room
Red lipstick, so divine.
Takes a look around,
Drinking her red wine.

Straightens her red dress,
The red curtain falls.
Drifting to her entourage,
Each red rose calls.

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Right, bonus point if you know what colour it's about.

It's one of my earlier poems, that I wrote in about thirty seconds.

My friend said it should be burnt. I said he's not my friend anymore...

I write little short poems though. Mostly just for fun...
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  1. Virgil's Avatar
    That's a pretty good little poem. Thirty seconds huh? Shh, don't ever tell people how easy it was. Everyone should think you struggled hard and long on it.
  2. DanielBenoit's Avatar
    Quote Originally Posted by Virgil
    Thirty seconds huh? Shh, don't ever tell people how easy it was. Everyone should think you struggled hard and long on it.
    What Virgil said lol

    It's quite a nice little poem. You seem to have a good sense of imagery, though I would suggest that you get a thesarus and cut down on the 'reds'

    I especially liked "Drifting to her entourage."

    Good job.
  3. Heathcliff's Avatar
    Aw. Alright then.

    Thanks you guys. my teacher said the same thing about imagery.

    I've got to go, but I'll get some more poems going.
    Updated 11-29-2009 at 04:58 AM by Heathcliff