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Lost in Accounts

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Silas Thorne
, 05-24-2009 at 11:44 PM (1513 Views)
Where once we traded breaths
was filed
the spread sheets cleaned and catalogued,
these digits
touching on a tonguetip rest
remembered smiles
but where the smiles were placed
were lost
in an accountance, of a sense.
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  1. Silas Thorne's Avatar
    Excuse me if this still needs some work. Still have the dreaded flu, and my addled brain at this time thought it was quite good.
  2. Virgil's Avatar
    The rhythm of this is very intriguing Silas. I like the alternating long and short lines. To be honest I don't have a clue as to what it's about. Nor am I sure it's grammatically correct. But I do like the sound of it.
  3. PrinceMyshkin's Avatar
    As sad as it is succinct - and vice versa!
  4. Virgil's Avatar
    Oh I think I understand it now.